Two Men and a Hermit by Ashraff Mohd Fitri - Short, Horror - The peaceful day of two men is disturbed by the presence of an unknown man. 11 pages - pdf format

New writer interested in feedback on this work, please be nice

There are places where you could be more efficient.

For example, this:

Quoted Text Two men are sitting at a long wooden table, 15th century style, both sitting at opposite each other. The table is empty. Nothing is there.

Only needs to be one line. e.g.,

Two men sit at opposite ends of a long, empty wooden table,

It's kind of an issue throughout.

Quoted Text Ethan and Lewis does not say anything.

Do - not does

Quoted Text We could see a huge bowl in front of us. Ethan looks at the bowl with a tiny smile. His eyes are still almost asleep. Ethan pulls out the bowl quickly and hungrily.

You really don't need the we sees.

Quoted Text We just call him STU.

How about just calling him Stu when you intro him?

Quoted Text We can hear the sound of Stu's loud chewing.

Really taking me out of the read. Lose the "we's"

I didn't get the story - sorry - wasn't for me. Maybe others will like it.