Quoted from Warren Nice little short you have here, Zack. I'm sure this will get snapped up quick. One tiny, unimportant thing... FADE IN and FADE OUT are transitions that have meaning not just something we start and end a script with. So if we cut to black in any way there is nothing left to fade out from. you cant fade from black to black. This is one of the only types of scripts I would personally end with THE END or END or even FADE TO CREDITS, at least then we are fading to something. Really not a big deal if you keep it the way it is, just my pointless two cents I predict this will be in the hands of a filmmaker in no time.

Thanks for taking a look at this, Warren. Happy you enjoyed it.

You're spot on with your point about the transitions. Stupid mistake on my part. Lol. Easy fix.

Here's hoping someone picks this one up quickly.

Hi Zack, I like your two mugs in one mug shot pic.. hehe. anyways, this is a nice little short, creepy dark backseat, something in the pic that's behind you...BUT, I did see it coming and that's what fell flat for me. I feel if you want this to pop it needs a twist, a bigger more meaningful surprise. Or an answer to 'why is that in the backseat?' something extra. Easy to say hard to do....for me this just needs that little extra spice in the story to get it to really stand out...

Quoted from Kirsten Hi Zack, I like your two mugs in one mug shot pic.. hehe. anyways, this is a nice little short, creepy dark backseat, something in the pic that's behind you...BUT, I did see it coming and that's what fell flat for me. I feel if you want this to pop it needs a twist, a bigger more meaningful surprise. Or an answer to 'why is that in the backseat?' something extra. Easy to say hard to do....for me this just needs that little extra spice in the story to get it to really stand out...

Thanks for the read, Kirsten. Agreed that this needs a little something extra to help it stand out. Just can't think of a good twist. If you have any suggestions, please throw them at me!

Hope you are doing well! How's your feature coming together?

Okay... heres some shots in the dark..... hows about after she sees the image on the phone and looks back to see nothing there, her phone rings from an unknown caller. she answers and there's a creepy croaky and gurgling voice on the line. then it says something like, time to come to hell, or it's time?  So something more with the phone?

Or after she sees the image etc she talks to her friend about having done a seance and is now scared because of what the board had said. The friend or her mention that it said someones time is up, and as she mentions this the hands come out.

I think the hands need to come out when we least expect it... but when they do we know why.

I hope these make sense!! it's 5.30am for me...

Yep I'm doing pretty well thank you and yes I'm on a roll with the feature, feel like I want to know whats going on! even though I know....so hopefully that's a good thing...

Quoted from Kirsten Okay... heres some shots in the dark..... hows about after she sees the image on the phone and looks back to see nothing there, her phone rings from an unknown caller. she answers and there's a creepy croaky and gurgling voice on the line. then it says something like, time to come to hell, or it's time?  So something more with the phone? Or after she sees the image etc she talks to her friend about having done a seance and is now scared because of what the board had said. The friend or her mention that it said someones time is up, and as she mentions this the hands come out. I think the hands need to come out when we least expect it... but when they do we know why. I hope these make sense!! it's 5.30am for me... Yep I'm doing pretty well thank you and yes I'm on a roll with the feature, feel like I want to know whats going on! even though I know....so hopefully that's a good thing...

Thanks for all the suggestions, Kirsten. Agree that the hands need to come out when we least expect it. Can't wait to finally read your feature!