Dolorem Ipsum by Anthony Cawood (Anthony Cawood) writing as A Writer in a Rush - Short, Horror - A couple decide to cast a untested wish fulfilment spell on Halloween night and then wish they hadn't. 9 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

I thought it was interesting. Got more and more weirder as I went along.  Minor typos. You managed to get a few laughs out of me, and this is coming from a guy with no sense of humor. Or so I've been told. Seems all the parameters were met. Not bad, not bad at all.

All the best,

Ghost

'Medieval Incantations for Idiots' - I could not find a copy on Amazon.  Love it.

"...with a POP the light disappears into her loins." - I'm gonna be trying to unsee that one for awhile.

I love that idea.  Got the wrong side of the book.  Idiots buy books for idiots.  Go figger.

"I need your seed." - I feel the need, the need for seed! - This just keeps getting better and better.  

Yikes.  That's some creepy sh*t.  I liked it, though.

Very graphic and visceral.

Some of the banter between the couple is funny and compelling but other lines are awkward and seem like they are typos or intentionally strange choices?

"Cursed Sheela Na Gig" is truly a unique choice. The focus on genitals, child birth, and sex is provocative (very easy to say that a short in which a man's testicle are torn off is 'provocative ')

Writer,

Wow. Keep that spell away from my wife. Shit. Anyway, interesting story but not enough of a backstory to kind of hint why your female character wanted to do this so much. Had she maybe been obsessed with the occult and spells before? Something she'd always wanted to try? That may have helped a bit. Without that, for me, it really reads like just two kids out there for the purpose of YOUR story, not theirs, if that makes sense. Anyway, it was a little bit of fun, and kinda gross at the end, but I sort of liked that! Loved the response when she turned into an old hag... "Oh, fuck this!" Gave me a chuckle. Good job entering!

Steve

So I saved this for my next to last review, because honestly, it's way too creepy for me - some really disturbing imagery here, but to stay on my positive vibe for all the entries, it did have some funny/clever moments - "Medieval Incantations for Idiots" LOL - think I'll leave that one on the shelf if I ever come across it.  Also, in favor is solid writing and a definite "curse" for a theme.  Thanks for sharing....I think.  **Shivers**

Tbh, I didn't cared for it much when the ending happened. The writing is decent enough (minor typos) with the gory parts in it, however, that didn't help save it for me.

Good luck.

The ending was horrific, and since it was horror, a good entry. Typos here and there, but some of us were really rushing.

This one started out pretty good IMO. Then I had to google Sheela Na Gig. Never heard of her/it before. That was actually a surprise to me, so thank you for teaching me something I didn't know. There were some funny things about the book and such, but ultimately it kind of went a bit off the rails for me towards the end. Maybe rework the second half. Of those I've read so far, I put this one somewhere in the middle. Not great, but not bad.

A Writer In A Rush,

Didn't seem like you were, unless you're just really good when on your toes. Really enjoyed this one a lot, whether you rushed through it or not. I can kind of tell the idea was just spitballed, but the way it was handled was really fun. I wasn't sure where it was headed, but the way it panned out made me smile. Good job.

Sean

Funny and horrific at the same time.
Loved the banter!

I always found Idiot's Guides super easy and helpful.
Not sure I got the midnight deadline parameter, except to attend a party.

That said, loved this unique entry.

Thanks for all your comments, useful as always and will have a look when I get to the re-write.

This was the entry I wrote on the Friday night, so a little rushed  and as Sean rightly spotted it kinda evolved as I wrote it

I find the Sheela Na Gig a fascinating piece of medieval arcitecture/culture so I'm sure I'll revist her.