Hey Brendon,
Really nice writing here. Very crisp, clean, and a breeze to read, too.
Great job!
My only issue (for want of a better word) would be for it to be a little clearer at the end, as it's not clear if those who come a knocking, are melevalant or friendly.
Although I guess you perhaps want it more ambiguous to play on the horror angle, so I can understand your motivation for having it as it is.
Would I be correct in thinking that both Beth and Kate are already dead, and they just haven't accepted it yet? Kind of like The Others type of thing?
Good luck with it!
Cheers, Max
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