Haha. Hostel wasn't that bad! It was a good popcorn flick. But it's the type of movie you can only watch one time. I give him credit on doing it. At least it strays away from the other shit horror movies that are being released. It's also good to watch with a girl. I'd hold onto it for that reason. lol.

Well keep shopping it around. It's a solid script. I'm sure you'll be able to sell it.

i got stuck watching she's the man also. most horrible movie ever. haha.

Read this about 6/10s through and you lost me in a big way. This made absolutely no sense. I tried to keep reading to the end, but I just had to stop. I was getting annoyed.


I did make notes on what I did read:

near the beginning when she goes to see Brian, you put: I'm "doing" to see "brain".

Brian says "Don't act like you worry" I think care would be better in place of worry. Care just sounds like it's more of a personal thing and more emotional.

Another big thing I didn't like is there were a lot of similarities to both Psycho and The Shiing. Rainy hotel's already been done, and doesn't make much sense to be stranded. It's only RAIN a snow storm would have made more sense, but I suppose you didn't want it to seem completely like the Shining.

Dialogue seemed robotic at one spot near the beginning. It may be more of a personal suggestion, but incorporate more abbreviations to sound more natural. You put:
BELLE
Sir... I have no where else to go. Please. I need somewhere to stay. I will pay you whatever you need. 'I will sleep in the lobby. I do not care.'  
- I'd change it to "I'LL sleep in the lobby I DON'T care."

And there were a few other spelling mistakes, just couldn't reference them because no page numbers.

To me, since Belle paid up through Friday, sounding like it's several days, I think it would make more sense if she paid as little as she must. The weather report could be false and if it let up that night, she could leave the next morning, so why pay so much?

Why are there candles and lamps and flowers for smelling in a room unused for 20 years?

The scene where Carl wakes up Belle I think should be lost. It's too much like psycho, goes nowhere, and I think Belle should be more angry that he woke her up to see how she was doing in the middle of the night.

I got lost in places in time. Maybe you could put pm or am by the times or signify if it's day or night.

Why does she follow Carl into the basement after he just raped her?

Why did Belle start dancing and kissing Carl so easily. This made me dislike Belle and not care for her much at all after this. She just met Carl the night before, and they didn't even talk very much, and he woke her up in the middle of the night, and she's all over him??? huh??? And after telling Dan that she loves him all the time. This seems both out of character and bad for our (at least MY) caring about this character.

Why does she just watch the torture of the girl in the red dress???

Why doesn't she leave the hotel???

Why doesn't she call the police instead of just sitting on her bed, still aving casual conversations with the guy that just raped her??? Wow, I never knew rain could be such a deterrent that it keeps you from getting help after being raped. She never even runs and tells anyone else in the hotel.

The only thing that kept me reading was when she just seemed to cut from the torture scene and back into bed, and apparently it was a dream, so I forgave all that, but little did I know that here were more questions that lied ahead of me.

The guy in the suit, outta the shining again.

I thought it was a dream, but it all really happened???? She told Earl he took advantage of her. So why did she go right from the torture sequence to being in bed?????

The old lady not really being alive, once again more shining.

then Earl starts to tell about Carl, and then it just cuts to Belle being in bed and Earl telling her to get some rest??? Was this a mistake? or are you gonna fill it in later??? If so, you shouldn't post a script you're not finished with.

Then I just stopped reading when she went  down into the torture room, which was locked??? And then you said it looked the same as her dream. Well, was it a dream or wasn't it??????

This just made no sense and was very unnatural. I just wanted Belle to die already and get it over with, and left me scratching my head the whole time. I'm not trying to be mean, it's just there's not much good to be said about this.

I don't want to sound like an asshole. But how can one person give me so many questions on whats going on and stop reading the script a little more then half way through. Sure, mistakes are in the script but most questions are answered. I was not thinking the Shining or Psycho so in my case this script has NOTHING to do with it. It was not inspiration or anything at all. If you read my work in progress board for this script. You will see me build the entire story and change it all. The script does make sense. Say you are watching the Sixth Sense. You have no idea what's happening and 6/10 way through you just leave the theatre. Of course it won't make senses because you do not know the ending.

Everyone that read it enjoyed in some senses. Because most answers NOT ALL but most were answered in the end. This is like the critic who was actually Kevin Smith who gave Clerks 2 bad reviews and got bitched at because he said he left half way through. None of this is disrespect to you at all i promise. I just wanted to explain myself and what not.

I read the rest, since I was bored, and it didn't get much better for me and my previous questions still stand, and I didn't get the scene after the credits. It just wasn't my cup of tea, to put it nicely. But don't take any of my comments personally Andrew. I really was not trying to attack you. If I came off as an @$$hole, I promise you that certainly was not my intention. I just call 'em as I see 'em, and this just didn't work for me. Just my opnion. No hard feelings I hope.

We'll just have to make sure these issues are corrected in the revision, that's all. I took no offense, personally.

No hard feelings at all. I take it all as help for the revised version me and George are working on. But i just don't like people saying those things without reading the entire script. No offense at all man.

I read this and I think its cool. Great climax and ending. There is not really much for me to suggest except correct the typos. Besides Eli Roth, is there any other directors you are going to show the script too?

Once the script is entirely done and all errors are fixed and all scenes make sense and characters are all better. you know all that jazz. after all that i will shop it around and talk to some people about it.

This is what you can expect in the new version of The Basement.

more violence (of course)
more character development
an all new subplot with an all new character
some scenes are extended
more dialouge (which includes extra lines and the dialouge will all be improved)

and i might add some more stuff. we'll see what George and I can whip up.

Quoted Text Basement, The (revised) by Andrew Roby - Thriller, Horror - On her way to her mothers funeral, Belle Rogers stops at a Hotel until the rain settles down. But the Hotel is full... except for the Basement. And in the Basement only your sickest most horrific fantasies can come true. 72 pages - html, format

Is this the latest version of this script? Or you're talking about a new draft submitted but not available yet?

I ask this because I might take a look at this one. Thanks.

I am currently revising the script. I've read the script and all the reviews. I'm not really messing with the gore but working on character development and trying to iron out a lot of the rough spots. I'm driving Andrew crazy because it's taking me awhile, but hopefully, it will be better, at least in the character department.

Mr. Z,

Just wait until the new version is up. You can read the Revised version that is up now if you want but the version that will be  up will be more improved, make more sense, better characters and what not.

Ok guys. I'll wait for the new version.