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Some of it is just really in a personal taste thing for me in regards to buddy movies. I like them a lot. You have you Dumb and Dumbers - two similar buddies on a similar trip. And you have your Rain Man, The In Laws, Midnight Runs, etc - two polar opposites on a trip. The latter have always been richer for me.
If you wanted to read something of mine (not required) - take a look at the first ten of this:
The first being Alistair is Gareth Keenan to Ollie's David Brent, and Ollie is Oliver Hardy to Alistair's Stan Laurel.
The Office and Laurel & Hardy are my biggest comedy inspirations / loves. Certainly in the case of Laurel & Hardy, it's one of the most iconic partnerships in history. David & Gareth was always my favourite pairing in The Office, and I see these characters as my opportunity to pay homage to the genius of the two examples.
Cool, that is undeniable pedigree to be drawing from. I'm not too familiar with Laural & Hardy but obviously aware of their standing. Is naming one of your characters Ollie a little too on the nose though? The Office (UK version) is probably my favourite sitcom of all time (although I'm not much of sitcom watcher) Seinfeld and Curb are up there too so that should give you an idea of my comedic tastes.
Over 10 years ago now (where does the time go), myself and a friend were on a tour of Hollywood (in the back of an old, beat up pickup covered in painted movie stars), and whilst touring through swish neighbourhoodds in this embarrassment of a set of wheels, we got dropped off and decided to buy a couple of Jason masks. We wore them around Hollywood, right up to Rodeo Drive, where we were asked to remove them. The befuddledment this caused on the streets is the inspiration for them sporting the suits. With the advent of social media, it feels like society is meaner, and more primed to mock, so the inclusion of this was to touch on those two topics.
My feeling is that filmed right, the reveal could be quite humorous. A little characterisation that links to the initial phone call.
I get you. Maybe it happens further on but I wonder if you've considered Penny advertently kicking Ollie in the mouth going viral online? It seems nothing escapes the the lens of a camera nowadays so someone in the crowd could have filmed that moment. Combine that with his suit, his age and it has serious viral potential. Perhaps this might be too much too soon right out of the gate but an embarrassing moment going public at some point in the story could stoke the animosity between Penny and Ollie or serve as another knock back for both boys to endure.
No, that's a lie. What I haven't got across yet is that Ollie can be arrogant, and considers himself a superior fan, so the reality he doesn't have a pic yet eats at him. My issue with this is that being a superfan over a period of time, how on earth would he not have a pic; I've considered addressing this through an end credits montage of all the near misses, but I digress.
Ah right, I wondered about that. The post credits idea is a good one but I wonder could it be told as a flashback in one of Ollie's more vulnerable moments when he has to face up to his shortcomings (assuming there will be a moment like this here) It ties into that notion of undermined pathos I mentioned before. Just when we think the story is going to get all serious and poignant, its punctured by a montage of pathetic fails.
Of course, this might not be the tone you're aiming for. It's just comedies that try to go for the heartstrings generally don't work for me. I've always been a supporter of Jerry Seinfeld's "No hugging, no learning" mantra. Now, I appreciate that the latter is a harder sell for a movie framework than a sitcom but I'm all for no hugging in comedies of any description.
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