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This is my first time posting anything on these boards so here goes...
In the heading, you should always leave a space between location and time of day. For example, in the beginning, you have:
It should be:
INT. HOUSE - MORNING
Probably a typo, but you repeat it alot. So, you should definitely fix that.
Another problem I see involves grammer. Maybe you rushed the script in a hurry, but I suggest that you take your time in reviewing the script again and correcting the errors.
Also, try to see if you can add more action and less dialogue. Almost everything on the script is made up of very precise dialogue. The characters present their dilemma more through discussion rather than action. Try to reduce that factor and balance things out.
And always keep this in mind as you rewrite, if you choose to do so, is how can I, the writer, make this script unique for others to be slightly interested in reading. I hope i helped.
I'm sorry but I didn't see the point of this. There's no real story, twist or anything. If the points to show how a rebellious kid really does care for his mother then surely you should expand on this a little. At the moment it just seemed like a scene taken out of a bigger story, there's nothing to tell us why the kid suddenly goes from one extreme to another.
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