Exit by Vic Bogdanov (EasyTiger) - Short - Sometimes in critical situations people lock themselves up in tight capsules, let the air out and choose to stay pressurized. The story is about the first steps to exit the capsule. 19 pages - doc, format

Hey Vic,

This was a pretty interesting story.  Lol, to use one of your slug-lines, very avant-garde.  It kept the suspense pretty much the whole way through.  It also kept the sadness and depression, the feeling that everything's not quite all right, throughout the whole story.  I liked that.  I kind of figured what had happened to Vic, but still didn't know exactly if that was it.  You caught me off guard a bit when Pauline had said that horrible thing just so she could leave Jack.

There were a couple problems, not many, that I saw in the format (Actor's directions before they speak), but I'm sure I won't be able to say anything different than the dozen or so other people who will read this and pick apart every word.  (I just like to concentrate on the story aspect of the screenplay unless I see some major mistakes, of which I didn't really see any in your script.)

I do have one question, though, if you don't mind.  Just out of curiosity, which Radiohead album was it?  :-)

Pretty good, Vic.

- Mark

Mark's comment about your sluglines got me curious. What does NAT mean?

There's a lot of sway in screenwriting, but messing with sluglines isn't acceptable. You need to use INT. or EXT., no matter how creative you want to be.

Hi, rc1107

Quoted Text I do have one question, though, if you don't mind.  Just out of curiosity, which Radiohead album was it?  :-)

I actually meant OK Computer :)))

ABSteel

Shit, shit, shit!!! Thanks a lot for pointing it. You see, I translated the script from Russian and made this awful mistake due to my total inattentiveness! In Russian we write NAT (meaning nature), I knew very well that in English it was supposed to be EXT. But never mind, I'm going to ask the admin to replace the script with a modified and updated version which is a bit different from the original one.

Thank you!