The Trial of William Fee by Alexander Julien - Short - A young journalist interviews an old man who was witness to a terrifying event that happened sixty years earlier. The old man now lives in a hotel that was built on the very spot of which the event had occurred.  18 pages - doc, format

Hey Alexander

Not bad, good story you have there even if it has been done before. As you're probably aware the formatting for the scene headings needs to be cleaned up which can turn people off even reading it but other then that its pretty spot on.

As for the story I would say it was a lttle predictable but I was engaged till the end & thats a compliments since it was 19 pages long which some would say is lengthy for a short.

Bar one misplaced line:

YOUNG MAN
          That’s a long time to live in
          one place.

I thought could have been left out, the dialogue was top notch & flowed nicely which for me is the most important part of a script & will make or break it. Macafee's V.O during the flashback scenes was very poignant, he had some nice passages.

Is it true you can't be hanged twice if something like that happens.

Anyway good job, pity more people haven't bothered to comment even after 112 views or so. I've seen a lesser work here get reams of feedback but so is the nature of it. If you get a chance check out what I've done.

Cheers

Col.