Gunslinger: An Old Time Hitman by Xavier Gonzalez - Short, Western - A shorter rewrite of Gunslinger where a city slicker is sent to the desert to kill off some bartenders. 7 pages. - pdf, format

I really like your writing style.  It's about as bare bones as you can get, and makes for a quick and easy read.  An example of what I mean:

"The sheriff hits the floor dead. Gunslinger pulls knife out
of Sheriff's head.  He picks up rifle and jumps on horse.
Rides off."

You can't get much more economical than that with your words.

On to the story.  I found it kind of strange and unbelievable that anyone would put a mass contract out on bartenders.  I mean, it's not like they're irreplaceable, right?  The man who hired the gunslinger seems to believe that if he kills the bartenders of the rival bars, then his bar would be the only game in town.  Unless, of course, those bars bother to hire someone else to sling the suds.

It would make much more sense to me if the contract was put out on the owners of the bars.  This would probably put those places out of business for good.

I like how the gunslinger didn't fall for the old poison in the whiskey glass trick.  That was a good fight at the end.  You also seem to have a good command of old west lingo.  I found the dialogue very authentic.

So, I really like the style in which this script was written.  I just think it would greatly improved if you changed the targets of the gunslinger to someone other than bartenders.  

well back in those times old west towns were small. Not really much business in 'em except for bars and guns. So most of the bartenders back in those times did own the bars. In fact now a days the owner of pubs and bars are bartenders as well,  so I think that it could be pretty believe able.

I'm glad you like my writing style. I try to keep the actions short, in a way that they are very understandable and easy to read. So thanks for the comment on that... and so on I'm glad you enjoyed the script, thanks,

I also hope to write a second part to this... and hopefully I put them all together and make them into a feature.