Being a super nerdy fan of the series and, yes, even the new movie, I thought I'd give this a try. I stopped at page 5. The format's weird. You need scene headers. And leave out camera angles. The guards dialogue was extremely bad, even for DBZ characters. That said, you captured Vegeta well in such a short time. You're obviously a fan of the series. Read some scripts here and learn proper format. Good luck.
Not gonna rate this since I didn't finish it.
EDIT: oh, and please fix the synopsis. Tell us the basic plot of the movie... not that it's a sequel/remake of another movie.
~Zack~ |