A Normal Shot by Jay Rockberg - Short, Comedy - A deadly and compulsive woman stuck in a protection program struggles to live a normal life in NYC while constantly battling the hitmen sent to kill her. 19 pages - pdf, format

just read your script, a few criticisms if interested:
it looks like your screenwriting software inserted a cover page that you didn't bother to fill out.  not a big deal but it gives a bad first impression to see (insert title here).
The descript of bill hayden is a pretty awkward sentence.  maybe: BILL HAYDEN, 40s, a sarcastic, white haired man who looks like an overpaid bible salesman.  Or preferably drop out the least important adjective.
isn't it yadda yadda?  not yadi yadda? Not sure.
why have her say shes not a serial killer?  just have her say she kills people, then it leaves some ambiguity/tension until we find out what she means.
'it was like trying to knock out a coke machine', great line
A few other typos i missed, not a big deal.
Overall I think its the story that needs work.  It is pretty far from believable.  The idea of randomly picking someone to train as an assassin is pretty hard to swallow.  what was she doing beforehand?  did she have an skills?  also you have the evil powerful bad guy who we never even see.  other than an endless stream of hired guns, we don't know anything about him.  I know this is a short, so I'm not sure how seriously your taking it, but some more explanation/background would be nice.

i think you have a good story going here.  it's fun, it's campy.  it just needs a lot of cleaning.  

for one thing, you wanna keep it descriptions clean.  you're rambling in some cases and you have quite a bit of redundancies going like, "she takes this in..."  

you don't necessarily have to write out what she's thinking because the actor should know how to interpret it based on the context.  

character first introduced are CAPITILIZED, and you should probably capitalize groups of PEOPLE when first introduced in the descriptions.  

i noticed a few grammatical errors, so check on that.  

overall, i thought your story was quite enjoyable.  

Cool story, good to see a girl kicking some ass.   A little more background into the situation would have been worthwhile, instead of just expecting us to buy into the ideas.  Well written though.