The Hum by Adam Nadworniak - Short, Sci Fi, Horror - The plot concerns three small town friends Greg, Tom and Randal who are on there way home after a night of partying when suddenly a persistent and invasive low-frequency humming noise from a passing alien ship turns the majority of his fellow humans into mindless vicious killing machines who claim that they "COME IN PEACE". who will make it home alive? 16 pages - pdf, format

I think this is a perfect example of how a good logline is important to your story. What you have here in your logline is a rambling mess, and inspires no confidence that your actual script will be any good. Upon opening the script, it doesn't get any better. There are so many problems on the first page alone that I just gave up reading it.

To start with, you should fill in your title page. Having the title on the first page of your script is wrong. Having Cut To instead of Fade In is wrong. How can we cut to a scene when nothing has preceded it? Having M.O.S. in your first scene header is wrong. Having different visuals and different actions all lumped together in one long block of text instead of breaking it up is wrong. Your spelling is wrong. That's all I could bother to read with so many mistakes I'm afraid. So I scrolled to the end and you have all your personal details at the end of the script which is wrong. You then have a blank page with continued at the top which is wrong. Honestly mate, this is just a big mess.

Best of luck with it.

Cheers,
Tim.