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Don
Posted: February 1st, 2010, 5:21pm Report to Moderator
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The Classroom by Rico Alago - Short, Drama - When a Teacher is left without a classroom, her students decide to help.  25 pages - pdf, format


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I am not sure if the writer of this script is still on the boards, but I will take a chance.

For starters, when characters are first introduced, there names must be CAPITALIZED. This problem occurs at the very first page, so I am guessing that it continues throughout the whole script.

Besides the characters being CAPITALIZED, you also gave no description of what they look like at all. How are we supposed to picture them? We need some kind of description.

Also, the (CONTINUED) at the bottom and top of every page should be taken out. I had the same problem with my first script.

With the few spelling mistakes I see, I am guessing this is a rough draft, correct? If so, make sure to fix those small spelling errors.

Your formatting, while not perfect, is pretty good. I was afraid you were going to start using more than 4 lines for action lines, but you didn't, so that's nice. The story, overall, was good. I just didn't really care that much for it. It isn't my type of story.
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Jees. UK. Fella. You gotta change that avatar, lad. Please!


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