Carnacki: The Gateway by Chris Hodgson - Horror - Adaptation of the William Hope Hodgson story 'Gateway of the Monster' featuring his Sherlock Holmes like psychic investigator Carnacki. 64 pages - pdf, format

Dude...seriously...WTF?  C'mon, man...

In all seriousness...you have got to get a clue and read some scripts so you understand the format...what they look like...how they flow..what is acceptable...what isn't...etc.

This is something that I'm pretty sure literally not a single person will read, based on how it's presented.

Sorry if this sounds harsh, but you obviously need it.

UNREADABLE!!!!!

I cracked this open simply because I wanted to chide Jeff about being so harsh.  But after opening it and reading the first few pages I almost have to agree with him.  

I wouldn't say it was unreadable because if one tried one could read it - it wasn't like it was sloppy it was just using an odd format.

It made me curious though, did you invent that format?  How did you come to the conclusion that a screenplay should be formatted in that manner?  Did someone tell you to format it like that?

i would recommend, like Dreamscale, that you should have a look at some scripts to see how they should be formatted.   Or looks at a website that talks about the subject, like this one.

http://www.scriptologist.com/Magazine/Formatting/formatting.html

Good luck.

I read it all the way through, but yes the format was very bizarre.  Also there were major typos in the script.  If it's done in a regular format, I think you will have a good script.  The parts from the story should have been done in an official voice-over.  As it is, it's just too experimental to work.

I have to agree. The formatting here is intense (and I don't mean that in a good way). It really is all over the place. Even though it is really bad, I don't think you wrote this in a hurry, or to piss people off. You clearly just have no clue how to write a script.

I am quite sad that the format is off because, IMO, you clearly really wanted to tell a story that you really cared about. No one writes 64 pages just for fun. Don't be sad about your format. I had the same problem the first time I came here too. Here's what I would do - Keep your script, look at other scripts so you know how to format a script, and then edit your script and send it back in. I'm sure you have the ability to do this. Good Luck.