You write very fluently and your dialog rolls easily and neat. I liked your script and it got a good vibe to it.
Your missing a FADE IN.
I like it that you try to avoid the using of “we see” often, like many other writer around here is pointing as a no no, which I try to avoid when I write myself.
Cap ‘sexy woman’, maybe.
Sheena’s line ‘you mean salsa music’ is not connecting with her name, checked the rest of the script for it. Noticed you capped her name on two more occasions after JAYs question - “who”? (P.2) Is there any reason?
P.5. Scene Heading, How about putting ‘Basement room’, instead of ‘Anonymous room’. You still mention it in the description anyway.
I see you put a little reference to yourself which is funny, but be aware of too much of it. P.s do you need transition, ‘Cut to’? It would save your script pages and would be tighter.
You have 2 pages of nothing in the end. I think this script deserve a new tittle too, but it’s not a biggy, stuff like that can be altered in production.
All in all, decent, neat and interesting, hope your around...