All screenplays on the simplyscripts.com and simplyscripts.net domain are copyrighted to their respective authors. All rights reserved. This screenplaymay not be used or reproduced for any purpose including educational purposes without the expressed written permission of the author.
Dead Beat Cops by F.B. Lagrate - Thriller - Her first day on the job Ky Casey, the new agent for the State Child Support Division, is quickly and unwittingly introduced to the nefarious ways of the hardened agents charged with apprehending deadbeat custodial parents. Right from the training academy, Ky slowly begins to unravel the seedy, tangled corruption embedded in an agency dedicated to helping those with desperate needs. From agent to agent, to supervisor and above, Ky attempts to learn the truth. Continuously involved in agency games designed to thwart her zeal to succeed in her new career, Ky fights back in her own way to learn the secrets and corrupt operations of this hallowed State agency. 154 pages - doc, format
The all appeared a bit strange, to be honest - an awful lot of FULL CAPS that are unnecessary - kind of distracted from the story - which, incidentally, I figured seemed to be quite good; it was just that I found it difficult going. I am guessing that this is a spec script, and that you don't have any interest from pro companies, yet it reads something more akin to a shooting script -- too much direction; too many camera angles etc etc. A spec script needs to be cleaner than this - a simple body of work to see if it's worth taking further.
You may have trouble getting many people to read your script. At 154 pages, it's far too long. Your logline is also too long, overly-detailed and lacks punch. And the fact that you don't review scripts gives no one reason to review yours. It's a quid pro quo thing.
Pages: 1
Author
Dead Beat Cops
Logged
Locked Board