Hello Kyle - I didn't get very far with this.
There did seem to be some atmosphere that's you've captured, but I wasn't too sure about the formatting and the grammar - both of these had issues, and it kept drawing away from the script.
There's a of of direction here, numerous 'we's', and you seem to have a strange relationship with CAPS.
Some of the dialogue I really like - quick and short, didn't reveal everything, kept me interested.
If you could clean up areas of this, maybe it'd make for a good read?