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Posted: April 20th, 2014, 7:38am Report to Moderator
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Life by Samuel Theodros - Short, Drama - A fearful young man finally takes a chance. 9 pages - pdf, format


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I really liked the how Rob's pick-up attempt went and how he handled it, proving his point. It looked like it was heading fro a cliche then turned sharply and ended up being very entertaining and funny.

I really liked the theme and showing his future then going back to the present just before he spoke to Suzanne was really cool. Writing was slick and well-paced. The dialogue was funny.

Maybe it was a little too good, as I don't have any constructive criticism for you. But, there you go Keep it up!
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Hey Andy -- welcome to the boards - I've seen you give some feedback on a couple of scripts - nice to see you reading some.

On the script: Your & you're gets confused here and there, and the story's not very well established early on. Not sure if Samuel pitches in at all.
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