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Techno by Delvonnie Stephens - Short - Two special agents for the military must go and retrieve a cybernetic organism that has escaped from a military research facility in the Arizona desert. COPYRIGHT REGISTRATION #: TXU001722786 20 pages - pdf, format
Well...I made it to page 3. I think. There was a "3" at the bottom left of the page I stopped on, so I'm assuming that's page 3.
Here are a few problems with your script:
You don't need your copyright information in the logline.
You need a title page.
Your font is wrong. It should be courier.
Your format is wrong. The biggest problem is the fact that you have everything centered on the page. Read a few scripts on here to get a better idea of proper format. If nothing else, read a book on screenwriting format.
Your script lacks any character. It's as though you're writing by numbers.
Why does General #2 walk right up to Cyborg #238 even though everyone else in the room is panicking?
Why would the soldiers resort to hand to hand combat with a cyborg that isn't harmed by gunfire? If I shot someone and it didn't hurt them, I wouldn't run up to them and try to punch them. I'd get a bigger gun.
Your story sounds a little like Universal Soldier with a dash of The Terminator which is nothing new. If you want to get some reads and comments I'd suggest coming up with something completely new, or something written extremely well.