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Since the characters are not named and their conversation devolves from repulsive words to repulsive sounds, the most powerful element of this short script seems to be the loathing of the writer for the characters. Loathing can be especially effective when it's precise. Editing and punctuation are important.
1) I'd name the characters rather than number them. 2) So fat her face looks like melted cheese... not sure that this works as an insult. 3) Punctuation, sentences of dialogue should still be punctuated with a . 4) You don't need the end/start of page Continued's. 5) I expected the end would be some sort of punchline, like 'Hey girls, wanna share some food... donoghts all round?' but it just seeed a little flat. 6) I'm not sure if this is just too mean for my taste, but I think there's more humour in pointing the mirror more at the girls rather than a stream of fat jokes - just my opinion of course.
Yeah, this is pretty mean spirited. Definitely characters I didn't like (the use of a racial comment to make them more villainous) so, if that were your intentions, it worked...a bit. Honestly, this seems like something more personal, like you're venting (hence the lack of character names), and seems to have been written in haste. Plus, you use camera directions right off the bat. For a script, this is no good. Describe what is seen, not what an audience in a theatre will see. That's for the director. I also kind of agree with Anthony's number 6 statement. I felt this to be kind of "bitter" and an opportunity was missed with the girls talking all this shit about others, not really realizing they themselves are very disgusting people.