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SimplyScripts Screenwriting Discussion Board    Unproduced Screenplay Discussion    Sci Fi and Fantasy Scripts  ›  Trail 46 Moderators: bert
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Don
Posted: September 6th, 2014, 7:40am Report to Moderator
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So, what are you writing?

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Trail 46 by Brian Carraher - Sci Fi, Fantasy - An experimental military drug causes a cataclysm. 110 pages - pdf, format


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Hi Brian,

First interesting observation are exact height and weight of character introductions. Why?  Dialog is awkward and littered with tells, needs some work.

Page 10 is where it got silly. If OP is around,  will check out additional.

Gl with the script
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