Music is from the Heart by Edwin Siongkowinarto - Short - What really is music? In reality, the definition is universal yet varying, and it's the same when a boy and a girl of different culture and class clash in an underground subway station, where they share and learn more about the true meanings of music themselves.  10 pages - pdf, format

Hi Edwin,
This is very wordy and can be simplified. I would recommend losing some of the unnecessary details and avoid using words like "is heard" etc. for example:

"The sound of a train clattering on railway is heard"

Just, "Subway train oncoming" or something.

Try and set guidelines for the scenes instead of directing them.

Is there any significance to why bones is a year older? personally I would just make them the same age as a year or two apart real has no definition in appearance.

I would get rid of the continued at the top and bottom of the page.

It's not bad story it just needs simplifying.

I hope this helps.

Lee