Melted by Keith McDuffee - Short, Romantic Comedy - Two quirky lovers find themselves in dire straits, as they struggle against all odds to bring themselves back together and ever closer. - pdf, format

Hi Keith

Took a quick read, a couple of thoughts, just my opinion of course.

1) Is the title too revealing? It wasn't snowmen as I first thought but still got it when they were revealed.
2) I liked the idea and could visualise it easily, good work.
3) Wonder if it would be stronger if they were the only candles on 1 yr olds cakes, then as one is used to light the other they could cling on to each other.

Cute premise, I liked it.

Anhony

"Two animated eyes groggily open..."

I didn't pick up on the word "animated" the first time through. I didn't know you meant actual animation.

After all, human actors playing the two leads would be a tad awkward.

Reading through casually, I got a little lost regarding who was dipping which wicks into which "characters" and so on. But as animation, it might be just fine.

Clever idea.

Henry