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[url=http://www.simplyscripts.com/scripts/Cold-Hearted Murder.pdf]Cold-Hearted Murder[/url] by Rhonnie Fordham - Short, Horror - After killing his wife in a moment of rage, a man seeks the help of his friend, a local coroner, to help dispose of her body. 17 pages - pdf, format
As far as technical aspect go, this is fairly well written. However, there is a good amount that can be pared down to make the action and dialogue more concise. There are parts that have to be shown, not described. For example, "Two-run game, bottom of the eighth." How does the director show or tell this?
On the flip side, I liked the twist at the end. I won't go into detail, so I won't be a spoiler, but it was definitely not readily apparent that was how it was going to go. There were hints in how he handled Will's panic, but it was not overt.
Glad ya liked it, man. Means a lot. And I thought about condensing it since 15+ page short scripts aren't exactly a goldmine, but I don't know, I think it reads fairly well and quick. Kinda Tales From The Cryptish which was the idea.
Also, when I submitted the script I forgot to send the .PDF (idiot alert, I know), so the Admin e-mailed me later, and I sent him the copy, so that's why ya gotta copy and paste.
If it makes it any easier, here's a link to it on Dropbox: