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Don
Posted: August 29th, 2015, 6:25pm
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Lady At The End Of The Pier by Jack Jones - Short, Horror, Dark Comedy - If you go down to the pier today, you're in for a big surprise… 2 pages - pdf, format
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AnthonyCawood
Posted: August 29th, 2015, 7:09pm
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Hey Jack, took a quick look... just my opinion of course... SPOILER ALERT I couldn't figure out what the 8 8 8 was, but it intrigued me... even when she draws the blade I was momentarily confused... then 9 9 9 - clever twist and I liked it. Two pages used effectively - good effort imho Anthony
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eldave1
Posted: August 29th, 2015, 8:16pm
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Thought this was pretty solid.
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DustinBowcot
Posted: August 30th, 2015, 3:23am
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Simple... urban tale-like. Written well, but not a story for me... well, there isn't a story. Who is she? Just an old lady that kills people while hanging out at the end of a pier, and she's managed to do 8 of them, sorry, 9. Does she clean the blade every time? Maybe a pack of baby wipes in her jacket pocket? A trilby is a hat... there isn't any need to write, trilby hat. Just trilby will suffice.
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Reef Dreamer
Posted: August 30th, 2015, 3:27am
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Well written, decent mood, and a twist. I don't know, it just didn't do a huge amount for me, but sound work. Cheers
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Sandro
Posted: August 30th, 2015, 8:05am
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Expertly written script, motivates me to try my hand at an ultra short such as this. Nary a superfluous word, each sentence creates mood and propels us forward. The brevity, however, works both for and against you here. It's more of a sketch than a story, but because it's such a super quick read I don't mind very much. It's good as is but I definitely wouldn't mind reading an extended take on it. Sandro
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RichardR
Posted: September 1st, 2015, 1:32pm
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Jack I think this is comment number 666 666 666.... Well done. A solid little tale that works for me. We get just enough to keep us in the game until the ending comes. Less is more in this case. Best Richard
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kingcooky555
Posted: September 1st, 2015, 2:11pm
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Nice two pager. I personally liked it. However, I'm not sure how someone can produce it as there's not much "meat" in it.
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JackJ
Posted: September 10th, 2015, 9:19pm
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Hi all, Thank you to Don for posting my script and thanks to everyone that has read and posted their thoughts, I appreciate it.
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TonyDionisio
Posted: September 10th, 2015, 11:01pm
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That whole BOLLARD paragraph made my eyes bleed.
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JackJ
Posted: September 11th, 2015, 2:51am
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That whole BOLLARD paragraph made my eyes bleed.
It's a bit messy.
Kinda rushed the ending too.
Oh well.
Thanks for reading, sorry for the blood tears.
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