The Last Footage by Dominik Kapus - Short, Drama - An 11 year old has the ability to cut a scene from his future everyday, but things turn ugly after he accidentally creates his death scene. 10 pages - pdf, format

Dominik,

A decent attempt here. Good action and some tense situations. Where you go wrong here is that everything seems so planned out in the script -- there's a reason for everything but no real explanations. You need to delve deeper into these characters and figure out the why and the how before you shovel it to us. How did Steven come across these mysterious files? Why was the teacher involved? Some crime syndicate, okay. But why? We're they holding her son ransom? How was she involved with the masked man, who Steven conveniently over hears talking about the bomb on his phone. See what I'm saying? There's a reason for everything, but none of them solid nor do they give a satisfying explanation as to why this bomb incident is taking place.

But keep at it. You kept your story taut, and it wasn't a chore to read at all! Good luck with your future works!

Steve