Basket Case by Abu Nuwas - Short, Animation - Fruits are discussing their interactions with humans. - pdf, format

Abu,

Very witty, some good paced humour in this little gem. Flow was good, I could picture the characters and I did have a chuckle at some of the gags. "Because Danny works for a bank".

Some formatting issues, parenthesis need to be on a separate line at the appropriate indent. Some other minor grammar issues which need addressing.

Very much enjoyed this one. Good work.

Hey Abu,

I noticed grammar issues as well.  Nothing that can't be fixed though.  Take a look through it again.

I liked the concept.  I really wanted a hand to come into the jar and cause mass chaos among the fruit, but perhaps that's just me.

And I couldn't figure out what was happening with the grape at the end.  Did he kill another grape?  Maybe I'm just not in the ball this morning.

Fun concept though.

Nolan

Not a fan of the confidential and copyright water marks on the scripts - they serve as a distraction to the read.

Quoted from eldave1 Not a fan of the confidential and copyright water marks on the scripts - they serve as a distraction to the read.

I agree. I didn't understand if you used a software to write this in, that wasn't licsenced or if you put the watermark on there.

There are some types of software online where you can remove a watermark.

I also find dropbox a bit annoying when compared to the uploads made on this site. I would imagine that uploading to dropbox helps this site out, as it doesn't waste space on the simply scripts server.

Far as the script goes, I thought it was cute. But, when are talking fruits not?

Also, have you heard of the series of movies called BASKET CASE. They are totally different than this, hahah.

Quoted from Kia Also, have you heard of the series of movies called BASKET CASE. They are totally different than this, hahah.

First thing I thought of... bit of an anti climax to find it's about talking fruit.

Maybe should have titled it The Grapes  of Rats

Fruity Loops does seem like the obvious choice, or Loopy Fruits, or Pick Of The Bunch.

And why not just put a (c) on it? Also, 'Confidential'?  when it's posted on an Internet forum?

Ha, funny Dave.  

Very Interesting story. You had a lot of good moments in their with some irony and puns I enjoyed.

A few gramatical errors and formatting you need to look at though