Simulacrum by Richard Russell - Short, Drama - A member of a case review team finds out he can't control results. 10 pages - pdf, format

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Hi Richard,

I have to say; this is just as confusing as Baudrillard’s ‘Simulacra and Simulation’, lol. I get the sense we’re in some future dystopia where corporations have inadvertently swung so hard to the left that they’ve actually slammed everyone into a communist brick wall? Just a guess, of course. All the best.

Hi Richard,

This is a good glimpse into the future.... very likely....haha.

I was waiting for  him to go off at her for not letting him know earlier that his dad had been taken away. This is the only thing that stuck out.
You showed us his frustration and parts of his personality well. And that he's a little more interested in looks than personality in his relationships....his wife/girlfriend, was kind of humorous.

R,
Goal?  Obstacles? Tone?  So this is a representation of the future?
Not sure what you were going for.  Kind of left me empty.

The Connor - Robin banter was somewhat amusing.

I needed more "story"  depth.  

Maybe just me.  Hope it works for you.

JJ