Hey, Sunilk: plenty of problems on page 1 which means there are problems throughout.
1. EXT DAY STREET NEXT TO A METRO STATION
The slug is incorrect:
- Do not number it - no need
- Always indicate time (DAY, NIGHT) at the end of the slug
- Period after EXT or INT.
- Hyphen sub locations.
The above should be something like:
EXT. CITY STREET/METRO STATION - DAY
VIKRAM is a 35 year old software engineer. No
specs, average looking.
Eliminate the is and ares and don't tell us what they don't have - i.e., no specs isn't needed. Also you have an unfilmable - i.e., how does someone film software engineer. That must ne demonstrated through action or dialogue. This should be something:
Walks with a slight stoop brought
on by carrying a laptop bag around. Dressed in an
anonymous grey suit. Seems like a person you would not
remember seeing before.
Hordes of people walking into the station, any working
morning, sunny and clear. One of them is Vikram who does
not stand out. Drably dressed in an "acceptable" grey
suit. Bearing of sadness.Face of a person who has
forgotten to smile by himself.
Most of this over written and again unfilmable. You are writing in novel fashion.
The first two paragraphs can basically be boiled down to:
VIKRAM (35), average looking, gray suit, walks with a slight stoop through a crowd in the station.
I've stopped here - there are just so many errors. Take a look at some scripts to get a sense of how they are formatted/written. Best of luck