The Cell by Devon Kessler - Short, Horror - Four college students enter an abandoned prison for a class project. When one student discovers and unleashes an ancient entity, is bent on killing them. 28 pages - pdf, format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Devon,

Congratulations on finishing your screenplay.

Just a couple of observations and suggestions for you.

Formatting issues. It looks like you used some sort of screenwriting software but you may have used it incorrectly.

Characters:
-Characters names stand alone. Unless a Voice Over (V.O.) or Off Screen (O.S.) is being utilized. You do not need to add ( after every name.
Example:
ANTHONY:
Testing it...I took it to my cousin's and
we almost destroyed it after we flipped
his Jeep...thankfully though, not broken!
-Should be,
ANTHONY
Testing it...I took it to my cousin's and
we almost destroyed it after we flipped
his Jeep...thankfully though, not broken!

Parenthetical:
-A parenthetical should fall between the Characters name and the dialogue. Not on the same line as the characters name.
Example.
HARLEY: (Aggravated)
Superb! Over the moon that it isn't
broken! Why did I need to be involved
with this again?
-Should be,
HARLEY
(Aggravated)
Superb! Over the moon that it isn't
broken! Why did I need to be involved
with this again?

Dialogue:
-I would suggest reading your dialogue out loud. That way you can hear how it sounds. P.S. it always sounds better in our minds than on paper and out loud.
Example:
HARLEY: (Aggravated)
Superb! Over the moon that it isn't
broken! Why did I need to be involved
with this again?
-This doesn't sound natural. Unless maybe it is a period piece and that is  the way people spoke back in the day. But definitely not in my day.

Sluglines/Scene Headings:
-Do not use : in your sluglines and scene headings.
Example:
INT. WOODROW PENITENTIARY: ENTERANCE - NIGHT
-Should be,
INT. WOODROW PENITENTIARY - ENTRANCE - NIGHT
-Or,
INT. WOODROW PENITENTIARY, ENTRANCE - NIGHT

Spelling/Typo's:
-They happen to everyone. I am just another set of eyes.
Example:
INT. WOODROW PENITENTIARY: ENTERANCE - NIGHT
-Should be,
INT. WOODROW PENITENTIARY: ENTRANCE - NIGHT

Exposition:
-This is more of a show, don't tell issue. It's easy to just come out and tell someone that they are someones girlfriend in dialogue. Don't take the easy road.
Example:
ANTHONY:
Testing it...I took it to my cousin's and
we almost destroyed it after we flipped
his Jeep...thankfully though, not broken!
HARLEY: (Aggravated)
Superb! Over the moon that it isn't
broken! Why did I need to be involved
with this again?
ANTHONY:
Simple, that is because you are the
most incredible, fantastic, greatest
girlfriend in the universe and would do
anything for me!
-Suggestion,
ANTHONY
Testing it. I took it to my cousin's and
we almost destroyed it after we flipped
his Jeep. Thank god it didn't break!
HARLEY
That's awesome babe. So why do you need my help with this again?
Anthony wraps his arm around Harley and kisses her cheek.
ANTHONY:
Because you love me.
Harley kisses Anthony back.
HARLEY
Sometimes I wonder why.
Harley takes a seat nearby..
ANTHONY:
Ouch, babe. That hurts.
Harley smiles.

Again, just my opinions and suggestions.

Best of luck on your current and future projects.

All the best,
Marty