Thank you very much for giving this a read and commenting.
Your first two points I would agree with wholeheartedly. I should really add more of a struggle of the mother to tell the son, ultimately she want's to tell him the truth because the alternative is her son believing Satan is coming down the chimney - I need to readdress this.
I very much struggle with dialogue, working on it but I assume it will come with time and practice - I hope anyway.
The camera, I have not made this up, have you not seen these things for sale? Santa cams, parents put these thing up and I think they are horrible lol I also read a story recently about a schoolteacher putting one up in the classroom so the kids behaved, the parents were outraged lol.
Anyway, the read is appreciated. If I can return the favour drop me a PM - I'm not great but I am honest lol