Wishbone by Jeremy Storey - Short, Drama - When a grief-stricken writer is given a chance to save the one he loves, he must decide between his heart, or doom a million strangers. 23 pages - pdf format

contests: Creative World Awards 2015 - semifinalist; American Gem Literary Festival 2016

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Not much to say, other than I loved it, Jeremy.

You seem to have mastered the long-ish Short whilst keeping the reader enthralled.

Okay, few nitpicks:
I don't think you need the Sequence Of Shots p.3, or the CUT TOs, but it reads fast nonetheless. A few SLUGS skipped over (why are your headers smaller font btw?)

Anyway, reminiscent of The Box, but different enough and with your own original take.

Poignant, great blend of humour, drama, thriller even, and it stays with you, (me) which is what good writing is meant to do.

Hi Jeremy,

Another great short from you. You have an excellent handle on building character relationships, dialogue, and the art of subtext.

You should be writing features, I feel like you really have the ability to make something out of screenwriting. Every time I read one of your stories I'm completely involved and lost in the story, it's a rare ability to do that well and consistently.

Loved it.

Also, reviewed here on the SS Blog page:
https://www.simplyscripts.com

https://www.simplyscripts.com/.....able-for-production/

Hi again,

Do you have a link to Adrifting? It seems to be based on at least some version of this script. I’d love to watch the film if it’s still around.

I did try searching it but come up blank.

Cheers.

Warren, I found this but it requires signing up, which I'm always wary of:

https://001avadultmovie.cf/dvd.....y-jeremy-storey.html

Hopefully Jeremy can shed some light.

Quoted from LC Warren, I found this but it requires signing up, which I'm always wary of: https://001avadultmovie.cf/dvd.....y-jeremy-storey.html Hopefully Jeremy can shed some light.

Thanks Libby, I've seen some of my shorts offered on a similar service. I think it's dodgy, so will definitely wait for Jeremy to chime in.

Quoted from Warren Thanks Libby, I've seen some of my shorts offered on a similar service. I think it's dodgy, so will definitely wait for Jeremy to chime in.

Firstly, thank you for the kind words...

Secondly, here's the link to Adrifting: https://vimeo.com/130489566

Dir: TJ Ramini

And yes, I should confirm this short film is based on Wishbone.

Quoted from Jeremy Firstly, thank you for the kind words... Secondly, here's the link to Adrifting: https://vimeo.com/130489566 Dir: TJ Ramini And yes, I should confirm this short film is based on Wishbone.

Thanks, mate. I'll be watching this today at some point. Looking forward to it.

That was so good, definitely one to be proud of.