Law School by William David Glenn IV - Short, Thriller - A potential law student interviews an attorney about his craft, but as their discussion continues his true vengeful motives come to light. 6 pages - pdf format

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I'm strictly an amateur here, you understand. So you may want to take my comments with a grain of salt. But I thought this was one of the best short scripts I've read since joining the Simply Scripts community.

My only problem was that your log line gave too much away. As soon as Wilson began coughing I suspected poison.

But again, this was a real professional script and a great read.

I was impressed with this script.  Very well written and it kept my interest.  As soon as Wilson began coughing, I also believed that Logan was out for revenge.  How did the interview turn into a turn-around of the table, so to speak.  When Logan was questioning Wilson, and then Wilson began coughing, you knew that there was a plan of "revenge" beginning to happen.  Still, I enjoyed this little script of revenge.  Nice job!!

Indeed.. Very well written!

I felt sorry for Wilson as he came across sincere in having done his best. Logan, a killer himself.. maybe just like his brother was? That said, it made for a good story.    

Hi, William,

Nice short revenge drama. That's all I can say. Decent writing too.

Good luck.