Book of the Month by David Miller - Thriller - Unaware he has triggered a chain of events that will lead to a nuclear holocaust in the 1987 post-cold war era, an amateur novelist must transform himself and travel halfway around the world to prevent World War 3. 76 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Hey, David.

76 pages, a little short for a feature, preferred range is 90-120.

Remove the logline from the title page.

A FADE IN:, left side, before your 1st slug.

Your 1st slug, I would include a Super for 1987 and NJ location and have the slug be simply a Commuter Train Station.

Don't repeat in action what's established in the slug, "platform."

The 1st two blocks of action tell us more than show us. Keep it simple.
"ROBERT CAIN (30), eyes a smudge on one shoe, gives it a hand shine."

Throughout the script, big blocks of dialogue and action, makes very hard to read, and loses the flow in the script. Break it up, max 4-5 lines in action and streamline dialogues, even your parentheticals are bulky, which might be better suited for action.

Good luck on your script.

Frank