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Hello, I'm Jon and this is the first script I have written and produced. I'm new to the site and wanted to post my own work before I commented on others. Any and all feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thanks!
The script itself is not at all in the proper format. Headers are wrong, characters are not properly introduced, camera directions submitted withing dialogue, etc.
So - bottom line - this is not really a "script". It's words on paper that you are filming.
So - if you are going to film all of your own stuff - I guess it doesn't matter. But if you are serious about writing scripts - you need to learn the basics. - there are a ton here you can view as well is some basic Googling (how to write a scene heading, how to write a dialogue block, etc. etc,).
The script itself is not at all in the proper format. Headers are wrong, characters are not properly introduced, camera directions submitted withing dialogue, etc.
So - bottom line - this is not really a "script". It's words on paper that you are filming.
So - if you are going to film all of your own stuff - I guess it doesn't matter. But if you are serious about writing scripts - you need to learn the basics. - there are a ton here you can view as well is some basic Googling (how to write a scene heading, how to write a dialogue block, etc. etc,).
Best of luck
I appreciate the feedback and will look for ways to improve on my next project. Thanks!
All said about formating. I read through it, reading only the dialog to see a story. There was no real story were for me. That's just my take.
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