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Jacklyn
Posted: December 5th, 2020, 7:33am Report to Moderator
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Hi guys,

This is a question to experienced screenplay writers:
I have a scene when a demon manipulates one of the characters. The character is on the EARTH, and the demon is n HEAVEN ( see a sample below).
My question: how to correctly format this?

Many thanks 4 any advice!

A SAMPLE:

EXT. VILLAGE  - DAY

Mi is backing away in fear and disbelief.

EXT. HEAVEN - CONTINUOUS
Demon watches the battle with tension.
Then: A transparent SHELL separates from him and dives into Zo's body.

EXT. VILLAGE - CONTINUOUS
ZO’s BODY trembles for a split second. An evil spark appears in his eyes.



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First off, welcome to SS, Tatjana!

I'm off to bed but I will just make a few comments.

Shouldn't the location of the demon technically be HELL? I don't know... Where do demons reside?
Aren't demons fallen angels, cast from heaven?

There'd be no CONTINUOUS  imho, as that would only relate to the same location and you're cutting from one location to another. I think you might benefit from Intercutting there.

I also think there needs to be some description of each location before you launch into action but that said you may have edited the scene you've posted.

Mi and Zo kinda confused me too. Is Zo the demon?
What's Mi seeing when backing away?

Okay, I'll leave the rest to the other slug experts.
And post some links to the site that may be beneficial for you in how to navigate the site etc., tomorrow.



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Quoted from Jacklyn
Hi guys,

This is a question to experienced screenplay writers:
I have a scene when a demon manipulates one of the characters. The character is on the EARTH, and the demon is n HEAVEN ( see a sample below).
My question: how to correctly format this?

Many thanks 4 any advice!

A SAMPLE:

EXT. VILLAGE  - DAY

Mi is backing away in fear and disbelief.

EXT. HEAVEN - DAY
Demon watches the battle with tension.
Then: A transparent SHELL separates from him and dives into Zo's body.

EXT. VILLAGE - DAY
ZO’s BODY trembles for a split second. An evil spark appears in his eyes.



There can never be two locations in one scene.

Besides, you have already done it correctly. Film is a visual medium, what you write, we see.

Code

EXT. VILLAGE  - DAY

Mi backs away in fear and disbelief.

EXT. HEAVEN - DAY

Tense, Demon watches the battle.
A transparent shell, a replica of himself, separates 
from him. 

EXT. VILLAGE - DAY
ZO trembles as Demon's shell enters his body and 
an evil spark appears in his eyes. 



Just a tiny rewrite. You might want to add more.
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You could use an intercut -

EXT. VILLAGE  - DAY

Mi is backing away in fear and disbelief.

EXT. HEAVEN - CONTINUOUS

Demon watches the battle with tension.
Then: A transparent SHELL separates from him and dives into Zo's body.

INTERCUT BETWEEN VILLAGE AND HEAVEN

ZO’s BODY trembles for a split second. An evil spark appears in his eyes.

Here's an informative link:

https://www.screenwriting.info.....0between%20locations.


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Jacklyn
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Thanks a lot!

I made a new re-write, see sample #2.

SAMPLE #2

EXT. VILLAGE  - DAY
Mi backs away in fear and disbelief.

CUT TO:
EXT. SKY - SAME TIME
Tense, Demon watches the battle.
A transparent shell, a replica of himself, separates
from him.

INTERCUT -- SKY/EARTH
A TRANSPARENT SHELL separates from Teen Demon and dives into ZO’S BODY.

EXT. VILLAGE - CONTINUOUS
ZO trembles as Demon's shell enters his body and
an evil spark appears in his eyes.

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The main thing is CUT TO and INTERCUT.

How it looks now? Super thx!


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Close. IMO you don't need the CUT TO and you don't need additional headers once you've established the INTERCUT

EXT. VILLAGE  - DAY

Mi backs away in fear and disbelief.

CUT TO:
EXT. SKY - SAME TIME

Tense, Demon watches the battle.
A transparent shell, a replica of himself, separates
from him.

INTERCUT -- SKY/VILLAGE ON EARTH

A TRANSPARENT SHELL separates from Teen Demon and dives into ZO’S BODY.

EXT. VILLAGE - CONTINUOUS
ZO trembles as Demon's shell enters his body and
an evil spark appears in his eyes.



My Scripts can all be seen here:

http://dlambertson.wix.com/scripts
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Great!  Look neat


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Re-write #3:

EXT. VILLAGE  - DAY

Mi backs away in fear and disbelief.

EXT. SKY - SAME TIME
Tense, Demon watches the battle.

INTERCUT -- SKY/VILLAGE
A transparent shell, a replica of Demon, separates from him and dives into ZO’S BODY.

ZO trembles as the shell enter his body, and an evil spark appears in his eyes.

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comments are always welcome!


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Quoted from Jacklyn
Re-write #3:

EXT. VILLAGE  - DAY

Mi backs away in fear and disbelief.

EXT. SKY - SAME TIME
Tense, Demon watches the battle.

INTERCUT -- SKY/VILLAGE
A transparent shell, a replica of Demon, separates from him and dives into ZO’S BODY.

ZO trembles as the shell enter his body, and an evil spark appears in his eyes.

##
comments are always welcome!


That works


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Many thx!


Ask, and it will be given to you;
Seek, and you will find;
Knock, and it will be opened to you."
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