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MarkItZero
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Seeing a lot of these victim who turns out not to be one. Not your fault, with 25 scripts there's bound to be repeats. I just wish there was some further angle you could find. I do like murdering vampires though.


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Tough luck for the Midnight Mangler that he ran up against a vampire. It's a twist, alright, but one that's been done before, so maybe a further twist could have been added. Something like MM turning out to be a werewolf.
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Seems to be a theme running rampant through these scripts of being followed and then trying for a twist on that.  I guess a question I have is why is she running from the guy if she can overpower him in any event?  Was it just to lure him to the apartment?  Why would she gasp at finding out he’s in the apartment?  I wouldn’t think she’d be afraid of him, but maybe I’m missing something.  Still, it’s a fun story with a clever little twist in what she really is.  Good job here.


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Better be a Stone’s reference in here…

Wasn’t sure if she’s the Mangler or it’s him?

Writing has a nice flow to it.   A little too stock perhaps - lone woman followed home before turning the tables.  First vampire I’ve read of the bunch so there’s that.  Functional for the challenge and decently handled for what it is, just a little too familiar to leave much of a lasting impression.


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This was simple, but effective. I like the opening descriptions. My favorite one so far (but I've only read four).
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It all looked so good when I imagined filming this. In hindsight, it is quite pedestrian, but that's the beauty of these quick challenges, there isn't much time to reevaluate, you just commit and execute. Thanks for the feedback, it's always appreciated.

For those who aren't sure what happened, the man was indeed the Midnight Mangler, he just happened to pick the wrong victim (the line is in there). Lucky for her she can continue killing and people will just keep on blaming it on the serial killer, so she's safe and secure for a while.

She wasn't running from him either. The sun was coming up, that's why she was hurrying home. I didn't want to draw any attention to that though or it would have given away the twist. And I imagine in a world where there are vampires, there are also vampire hunters, or some other threat, so she still needs to be cautious about being followed.


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Andrew
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The thing that stood out to me most was the visual of the guy climbing through the window.

Really helpled me to imagine the whole scene and mood.

The story itself is similar to a few I've read, but this one gets the most out of the premise, IMO.


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