The Sensitive One by Fuzzy Dunlop - Driven to distraction, a man sets out to uncover the source of a mysterious sound only to find some noises are best ignored.  Short, Horror

Hmmm... not sure what I just read. It was hard to visualize a few things with the way they were written. And I'm probably just stupid, but if there was a twist, it went right over my head. I'll chock this up partially to me not "getting it".

-- Michael

So, are they trying to help him?? Like fix his brain? Or hurt him? So yeah...it's kinda confusing. I did like the imagery though. You did have me very interested, I just didn't understand the twist.

The writing is very good. It's strange and disorienting (in a good way). The only bad disorienting part is I'm not exactly sure what this other version of him represents. Is he a clone? Or a robot? Maybe I'm the only one not getting it, but I think it needs something more.

Hi Writer,

Well written but this one is lost on me. Going to need a bit of an explanation on this one at the end of the challenge. I think there was a twist, but for the life of me I have no idea what it was.

Sorry :/

All the best.

I think there could be something good here but it went over my head.

I'm thinking maybe he's connected to a droid or something? Really not sure.

Good luck.

This one feels too complicated for a 2-pager. Too many unanswered questions didn't leave a satisfying ending.

Different though, so kudos.

Dang it! I wish I understood this because it's actually written quite well. Robot or clone? Seems hi-tech but you'd think they'd have a better lab than the wood shop. I can't wait to hear what the writer says after voting. Well written but I think you needed another page.

The writing is muddled but it helps the story. Is the twist about some raw version of lobotomy been performed on Walt? I am not sure. But a nice read.

The writing is fine

The story didn't land for me

Robopatient! He will get his revenge on Angus Scrimm!

Feels like a part of a larger story. Could definitely be interesting if shot by a creative filmmaker. Nice work!

Writing is good for the most part, but I'm not sure I fully get it. Are they helping Walt? Or are they tricking him into thinking he is crazy?

Either way, it's pretty creative. Not a bad effort by any means.

Not sure what to make of this. It's well written and engaging but is there a bigger plot we're not seeing? Replacing a real Walt with a robot one? I didn't dislike it, it juts confused me a bit but the twist was solid.
Well done.

This is well written but the ending left me a little confused.

Perhaps it just need an extra page to smooth out the wrinkles.

Some kind of experiment in Augmented Reality, or AI type androids? The reveal of Walt seeing himself is unnerving, but if he’s some type of android, is he programmed to function under the belief he’s human? Seeing he reacts as a human would if they were in this type of predicament. Other than that, sorry, lost on this one, but the overall concept is surreal and interesting to consider as a bigger (script) project. Best of luck.