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Posted by: Grandma Bear, January 25th, 2019, 11:00pm
Love is in the air!
Welcome to the January/February 2019 OWC. Your challenge, should you chose to partake, is to write a properly formatted script 5 - 10 pages, not including the title page.
Theme: Love/Romance
Genre: Rom-com
Challenge: Roses, chocolate and something red must be in the script. They should not be mere props in the background, but play some part, even if small.
There will be a Review Page E-mailed to you for you to score the scripts you read. Please only give scores to scripts that you have read. Please do not rate scripts in your review.
Timeline: Scripts are due February 1st at 11:59PM EST.
Scripts will be posted February 2nd.
Votes are due February 15th.
Scores will be posted Sunday February 17th.
This isn't a contest - it’s a challenge. There are no official prizes, but stranger things have happened...
You may submit more than one script, but be aware that we have some seriously good writers here. IMO, it’s better to write one GREAT script than two or three mediocre ones. However, if you can pull it off, you’re welcome to.
You can revise your script as many times as you wish up until February 1st 11:59 EST. Do not put your real name on your script – this is an anonymous challenge. However, please use your real name when submitting your script here
https://www.simplyscripts.com/owc . After the challenge closes you can either have your script removed or resubmit your script with your name on it.
Participants are strongly encouraged to read and comment/review the other scripts submitted.
Please put © on your title page.
Best of luck and I hope everyone enjoys this challenge. :)
Posted by: Grandma Bear, January 25th, 2019, 11:00pm; Reply: 1
For those of you who don't like the subject matter or the genre. Try to think outside the box. Romance and love is not exclusive to a man and a woman, nor is it exclusive to a man/man or woman/woman love. I once wrote a script about a mime and a ventriloquist puppet, both male, who were in a relationship. It was produced too. Channel your creative side of your brains. ;)
Posted by: Warren, January 25th, 2019, 11:05pm; Reply: 2
If anything is going to challenge me its a rom-com. This is so far out of my comfort zone, but I'll put something up. I apologize in advance to all that subject themselves to it.
Posted by: Sandra Elstree., January 25th, 2019, 11:06pm; Reply: 3
These should be fun to read.
Where's my funny hat? I might spend all my time looking for it.
Chris? Channeling Chris.
Sandra
Posted by: Gary in Houston, January 25th, 2019, 11:06pm; Reply: 4
I was in until I saw that it had to be properly formatted.
I kid, I kid. I'm definitely interested -- glad to have a OWC to challenge us!!
Posted by: Mr. Blonde, January 25th, 2019, 11:15pm; Reply: 5
Channel your creative side of your brains. ;) |
What the hell is that? All jokes aside, you're certainly putting the challenge back in this. Should be an interesting one.
Posted by: LC, January 25th, 2019, 11:18pm; Reply: 6
Pia, Romantic dramady allowed?
I mean obviously no RomComs are outrageously funny and all scripts have drama elements, right?
I can't wait to read Warren's script!
Posted by: Warren, January 25th, 2019, 11:21pm; Reply: 7
I can't wait to read Warren's script!
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You need to set your expectations pretty low :P
Posted by: Grandma Bear, January 25th, 2019, 11:31pm; Reply: 8
Pia, Romantic dramady allowed?
I mean obviously no RomComs are outrageously funny and all scripts have drama elements, right?
I can't wait to read Warren's script! |
Romantic dramedy. Isn't that pretty close to rom-com?
Drama is conflict and is pivotal to all scripts regardless of genre. Which is why I'm sure Warren will do well because he understands this.
Posted by: Gary in Houston, January 26th, 2019, 12:07am; Reply: 9
It feels like every Rom-Com I've seen follows the familiar pattern:
Boy Meets Girl
Boy Loses Girl
Boy Wins Girl Back
Obviously the roles can be reversed and there can be same sex rom-coms. Based on the above sequences, it seems like it has to have a happy ending. However, would it be fair to say that we could do a Rom-Com with a unhappy ending, if it's in a comedic manner (kind of weird to think you could do that)?
Posted by: LC, January 26th, 2019, 12:35am; Reply: 10
Posted by: Mr. Blonde, January 26th, 2019, 12:45am; Reply: 11
Two questions spring to mind for me:
1. How much comedy would you figure is needed to qualify as a comedy?
2. Do both sides need to see it as romantic (for example: a stalker might see a relationship as romantic, but the stalked might not...)?
Posted by: ReneC, January 26th, 2019, 12:51am; Reply: 12
It's simple, straightforward...and well outside my comfort zone.
Challenge accepted!
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 26th, 2019, 1:09am; Reply: 13
I'm all in!!!
;D ;D ;D ;D
Here comes that Romantic I was referring to awhile ago...until new Mod Libby made me erase a line. HA!!!
Sounds like a good challenge to me.
Posted by: Warren, January 26th, 2019, 1:39am; Reply: 14
Natural Born Killers is a rom-com, right?
Posted by: Hank (Guest), January 26th, 2019, 4:16am; Reply: 15
This is my first attempt at writing a OWC. How does one submit their OWC script for reviews and scoring?
Posted by: LC, January 26th, 2019, 4:45am; Reply: 16
Quoted from Hank This is my first attempt at writing a OWC. How does one submit their OWC script for reviews and scoring? |
https://www.simplyscripts.com/owcHere's the link, Hank.
Pia has set out the details, page count, theme etc., on page 1 of this thread.
The countdown timer for deadline is also at the top of the discussion page.
You're not finished writing yet, are you? :D
P.S. '
There will be a Review Page E-mailed to you for you to score the scripts you read. Please only give scores to scripts that you have read. Please do not rate scripts in your review'.
Posted by: Hank (Guest), January 26th, 2019, 4:53am; Reply: 17
Thanks. Yes, I recently finished about an hour ago. I began an outline of the short script yesterday morning and began writing the actual script immediately after the criteria was announced, and was able to apply around half of the outline to this challenge.
Posted by: LC, January 26th, 2019, 4:55am; Reply: 18
Btw, I just checked that link and the only genre option is Horror, Thriller, Suspense, Noir.
I don't think Romantic Horror is an option. ;D
Needs changing. I'm sure Pia will get on it so best ignore that.
Posted by: LC, January 26th, 2019, 5:01am; Reply: 19
Okay, Hank. I was just kidding that you'd written it already.
Be aware of this then:
You can revise your script as many times as you wish up until February 1st 11:59 EST.
Posted by: Hank (Guest), January 26th, 2019, 5:10am; Reply: 20
I will probably do some revisions throughout the week if any new and worthwhile ideas pop into my head. At the moment I think my script is somewhat lacking in the comedic and also the romantic aspects of the challenge. Although I found it tough to create a cohesive short script when having a 5-10 page limit, but I enjoyed trying my darndest to accomplish that.
Posted by: SAC, January 26th, 2019, 8:03am; Reply: 21
What a great OWC, Pia! Hope I can come up with something as I’m away on business all of next week. But I am off early today and all of tomorrow!
Posted by: Grandma Bear, January 26th, 2019, 8:18am; Reply: 22
Rom-coms are my least favorite type of movies, so I googled and according to wikipedia, it's this.
Romantic comedy is a genre with light-hearted, humorous plotlines centered on romantic ideas, such as how true love is able to surmount most obstacles.
Posted by: Zack, January 26th, 2019, 8:56am; Reply: 23
Well, this is gonna be tough.
Quick question, you said roses, chocolate, and something red must be a part of the plot. Can the red thing be a rose? Or is that cheating?
Zack
Posted by: Don, January 26th, 2019, 9:30am; Reply: 24
Btw, I just checked that link and the only genre option is Horror, Thriller, Suspense, Noir.
I don't think Romantic Horror is an option. ;D
Needs changing. I'm sure Pia will get on it so best ignore that. |
I will get that updated...
Posted by: SAC, January 26th, 2019, 9:54am; Reply: 25
Well, this is gonna be tough.
Quick question, you said roses, chocolate, and something red must be a part of the plot. Can the red thing be a rose? Or is that cheating?
Zack |
Exactly what I was thinking.
Posted by: Grandma Bear, January 26th, 2019, 9:59am; Reply: 26
Quick question, you said roses, chocolate, and something red must be a part of the plot. Can the red thing be a rose? Or is that cheating?
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Something else. It doesn't have to play a big part, just shouldn't be a background item like a red pillow on a couch or such.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 26th, 2019, 10:08am; Reply: 27
Henb is done already? Huh? How does that work?
My advice...don't think you're done already. Read it over out loud...over and over.
My advice to everyone else, bring your A Game, cuz The Kid is gonna be all over this one!
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Posted by: Hank (Guest), January 26th, 2019, 10:18am; Reply: 28
It took me five hours straight, though the first draft is now done.
Thanks for the advice, I will read it over. I have already read it over a couple times, and am sure there's room for improvement, I just don't know what revisions to make yet.
Posted by: Gary in Houston, January 26th, 2019, 10:28am; Reply: 29
Quoted from Hank It took me five hours straight, though the first draft is now done.
Thanks for the advice, I will read it over. I have already read it over a couple times, and am sure there's room for improvement, I just don't know what revisions to make yet. |
Just make sure you get rid of all your orphans, because otherwise, no matter how good it is, you'll be disqualified.
Posted by: Hank (Guest), January 26th, 2019, 10:31am; Reply: 30
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 26th, 2019, 11:05am; Reply: 31
Just make sure you get rid of all your orphans, because otherwise, no matter how good it is, you'll be disqualified.
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Or at least tared and feathered in a very public setting!!
Posted by: irish eyes, January 26th, 2019, 11:08am; Reply: 32
Debbie does Dallas is a rom com ;D
Posted by: FrankM, January 26th, 2019, 11:30am; Reply: 33
I’ll be all over this RomCom thing as soon as I figure out how to write romance... or comedy.
Think the most recent one I watched was Killers.
Posted by: ReneC, January 26th, 2019, 12:30pm; Reply: 34
Quoted from Hank This is my first attempt at writing a OWC. How does one submit their OWC script for reviews and scoring? |
Remember, the scripts are posted anonymously. Don’t put your name on the title page when you submit it.
Posted by: Hank (Guest), January 26th, 2019, 12:34pm; Reply: 35
Thanks Rene. I thought of my pseudonym yesterday :)
Posted by: Philostrate, January 26th, 2019, 1:09pm; Reply: 36
Way out my comfort zone. But I'm gonna try :).
Posted by: Zack, January 26th, 2019, 1:28pm; Reply: 37
Got two separate ideas, both are pretty goofy.
Another question. Does it need to be a literal rose and chocolate? Or could it be metaphorical?
Zack
Posted by: MarkRenshaw, January 26th, 2019, 1:44pm; Reply: 38
Rom-Com's are so not my thing but that would be the very best reason to attempt this as it would be a challenge. Alas, I have too many writing projects on with deadlines so I'll have to skip. I'll try to check out some of the entries though.
Posted by: ReneC, January 26th, 2019, 1:49pm; Reply: 39
Got two separate ideas, both are pretty goofy.
Another question. Does it need to be a literal rose and chocolate? Or could it be metaphorical?
Zack |
I think that "they should not be mere props" suggests they need to be the real deal.
Got my idea. This will be fun.
Posted by: Zack, January 26th, 2019, 1:51pm; Reply: 40
I think that "they should not be mere props" suggests they need to be the real deal.
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I could argue that it actually suggests the opposite, but you're probably right.
That's one idea in the trash, then. Probably for the best, as it would have been pretty effin' gross. Lol
Zack
Posted by: PKCardinal, January 26th, 2019, 2:22pm; Reply: 41
Just make sure you get rid of all your orphans, because otherwise, no matter how good it is, you'll be disqualified.
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There goes my idea about young love in the orphanage.
Posted by: CameronD, January 26th, 2019, 2:48pm; Reply: 42
What's with the red stipulation? Easy enough to simply make a red box of chocolates and would that suffice? Or does the color need to be a plot point?
I'd hate to lose points in the judge's eyes because a color wasn't centrally focused on. And I know there are sticklers here who will if that's the case, lol.
Posted by: FrankM, January 26th, 2019, 3:00pm; Reply: 43
What's with the red stipulation? Easy enough to simply make a red box of chocolates and would that suffice? Or does the color need to be a plot point?
I'd hate to lose points in the judge's eyes because a color wasn't centrally focused on. And I know there are sticklers here who will if that's the case, lol. |
Blood.
Blood is red.
Just sayin'.
Posted by: Talldave, January 26th, 2019, 3:02pm; Reply: 44
The genre that has gotten me into the mess I’m in today, if it wasn’t for rom-coms I probably wouldn’t have three kids XD
I love em, love love love, yup, but I also loved my sanity at one point.
Anywho, lets see if I can channel my inner romantic...who am I kidding I love Sleepless in Seattle so it shouldn’t be too hard!
Posted by: PKCardinal, January 26th, 2019, 4:03pm; Reply: 45
I think that "they should not be mere props" suggests they need to be the real deal.
Got my idea. This will be fun.
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also says: must play some part, even if small
or, something like that.
No problem for me, though, as my idea centers on a box of chocolates that falls in love with a dozen roses. (Oops. I may have said too much.)
Posted by: ReneC, January 26th, 2019, 4:51pm; Reply: 46
also says: must play some part, even if small
or, something like that.
No problem for me, though, as my idea centers on a box of chocolates that falls in love with a dozen roses. (Oops. I may have said too much.)
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Oooooh, a polyamourous relationship! Or is it one chocolate for each rose?
Posted by: stevie, January 26th, 2019, 4:56pm; Reply: 47
I’m gonna skip this one too as I’m knee deep in two features at the moment.
Rom-coms ain’t my thing - I prolly have never even seen one lol - but I’ll try and read a few entries.
Posted by: LC, January 26th, 2019, 5:32pm; Reply: 48
Debbie does Dallas is a rom com ;D |
Subtle difference, but I think that's actually a romp com. ;D
Posted by: Warren, January 26th, 2019, 7:17pm; Reply: 49
I have the seed of an idea. This is tough.
Posted by: Scar Tissue Films, January 26th, 2019, 7:57pm; Reply: 50
Brutal.
The romance is hard enough.
The rom com genre is surprisingly tough... I'm realising why there are so few good comedies around.
With the extra elements as well, it's a very difficult challenge.
Posted by: Gary in Houston, January 26th, 2019, 8:36pm; Reply: 51
I can seem to think of several ideas that are good for a page or two, but 5-10 pages.... no.
I may have to double-space everything and have a ton of white space.
Posted by: Zack, January 26th, 2019, 9:06pm; Reply: 52
I can seem to think of several ideas that are good for a page or two, but 5-10 pages.... no.
I may have to double-space everything and have a ton of white space. |
Running into the same issue. Not sure how I'm gonna reach 5 pages with my idea. This is a tough one for sure.
Zack
Posted by: Pale Yellow, January 26th, 2019, 9:42pm; Reply: 53
I'm in, though it'll probably be last minute for me. :)
Posted by: DarrenJamesSeeley, January 26th, 2019, 10:56pm; Reply: 54
I don't mind som rom-coms. Some consider Silver Linings Playbook a rom com, although I never saw it that way. Say Anything is one of my favorite films.
I couldn't write a rom com to save my life.
Posted by: DarrenJamesSeeley, January 26th, 2019, 10:58pm; Reply: 55
Debbie does Dallas is a rom com ;D |
And he
50 shades flicks ---let us not forget...
Posted by: Mr.Ripley, January 26th, 2019, 11:42pm; Reply: 56
This is an interesting challenge. Can’t wait to read what you ladies and gents come up with.
Gabe
Posted by: Warren, January 27th, 2019, 12:34am; Reply: 57
And I have a completed script! Rom-com, I hate you.
Now to polish the hell out of this turd.
Whatever happens, I'm definitely in.
Posted by: khamanna, January 27th, 2019, 1:11am; Reply: 58
I was on vacation to Baku, Azerbaijan and on the tough time change right now. And, started school, yey, here in New York! I'm back to school - actually only taking a few design courses but this are the toughest for me as I don't sketch etc etc.
Anyway, can't do this one sadly. Good luck to all, I'll try to read some.
Posted by: Hank (Guest), January 27th, 2019, 8:50am; Reply: 59
Quoted Text Easy enough to simply make a red box of chocolates and would that suffice? Or does the color need to be a plot point? |
I believe the colour red has to be from something separate from both the roses and the chocolates. Not necessarily a plot point (though it could be), but an item that is utilized in the script at some point.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 27th, 2019, 11:08am; Reply: 60
Very surprised at several things...
1) That most are saying how difficult this is.
2) That at least 2 writers are finished already, first draft or not.
3) That numerous peeps are asking dumbass questions, when the challenge parameters are so clear.
Not at all surprised at a couple things...
1) Stevie is out (again).
2) That numerous peeps are asking dumbass questions, when the challenge parameters are so clear.
Best of luck to all. I'll start thinking about this tomorrow or Tuesday. No problem on the deadline.
Posted by: Mr. Blonde, January 27th, 2019, 11:35am; Reply: 61
Quoted from Dreamscale 3) That numerous peeps are asking dumbass questions, when the challenge parameters are so clear. |
What kind of dumbass question qualifies as a dumbass question? With that said, I'm in. I haven't written a short in about three years, so this should be an interesting one.
Posted by: khamanna, January 27th, 2019, 1:45pm; Reply: 62
Oh my God. The moment I said I was not going to write I jinxed it. Since then I cannot stop thinking about it and the stupid ideas keep arriving.
I even forgot half of them thank God. But one I remember - an alien falling in love with the Superman when they met up in the air. Here I said it out loud. Good for me - now I can't write about it for the challenge.
Posted by: khamanna, January 27th, 2019, 1:49pm; Reply: 63
So, stupid questions were asked?! I need to read the thread.
Posted by: Zack, January 27th, 2019, 3:37pm; Reply: 64
Who's asking dumbass questions? Please specify, Jeff.
Zack
Posted by: Mr. Blonde, January 27th, 2019, 3:41pm; Reply: 65
Who's asking dumbass questions? Please specify, Jeff. |
Well, I did. Lol.
Now, a question of personal taste which I'm curious of all people's opinions about. How dark and depressing can a romantic comedy get before the romance is no longer romantic and the comedy is no longer comedic?
Posted by: Hank (Guest), January 27th, 2019, 4:00pm; Reply: 66
I believe if there is at least one character that is without a doubt in love with someone or even to a degree something, then the script would qualify as romance, and I believe that everyone has their own preferences when it comes to comedy. I enjoy physical, surreal, dark, over-the-top, and silly comedy.
Posted by: James McClung, January 27th, 2019, 4:05pm; Reply: 67
Count me among those having a difficult time with this challenge (sorry, Jeff). I actually find open challenges more difficult than ones with strict parameters and would say this challenge leans toward the open side of things. The roses and chocolates also throw me a little since they're essentially cliches of the subject matter and can't easily be inserted into a romantic comedy context without feeling contrived somehow. And yet of course they can, because the challenge doesn't stipulate how they're to be used other than that they should be used meaningfully, which is a no-brainer for any writer worth their salt. In that sense, it's a pretty thoughtful, effective challenge, and I'm making best efforts to participate.
Posted by: James McClung, January 27th, 2019, 4:14pm; Reply: 68
Well, I did. Lol.
Now, a question of personal taste which I'm curious of all people's opinions about. How dark and depressing can a romantic comedy get before the romance is no longer romantic and the comedy is no longer comedic?
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Don't expect I need to tell you that this is entirely subjective. But I'll bite for the sake of discussion. I think once the primary aims of the story no longer appear to be romance and comedy, you could make a case that it is no longer a romantic comedy, even if perhaps it contains elements of romantic comedy. A simpler posit would be once the writer is no longer successful in their aims of romance and comedy, but that goes back to my initial comment that it's all subjective. Trying to be circumspect here.
My personal stance is that no such point exists. You can find romance and comedy in anything if you're savvy enough. I actually think there're tons of dark, depressing romantic comedies out there that are brilliant. I also prefer and even tend to seek out films with dark, depressing vibes generally speaking, so long as they're made sincerely and thoughtfully (sometimes the ones that aren't are fun too).
Posted by: CameronD, January 27th, 2019, 4:39pm; Reply: 69
1st draft done. Had a few hours to kill while car was serviced at the dealership yesterday.
I've willingly written a rom-com for a the writer's challenge, Till Cake Do Us Part, and I think maybe that helped a little.
https://www.simplyscripts.com/scripts/TILLCAKEDOUSPART.pdfIt's not so much the romance that is hard, but the comedy. And since that is so subjective it's tough to write. I'd say my current script is cute but not yet funny so I'll work on some lol moments the rest of the week.
Best of luck to all and let the funniest win!
Posted by: Philostrate, January 27th, 2019, 4:50pm; Reply: 70
Quoted Text Now, a question of personal taste which I'm curious of all people's opinions about. How dark and depressing can a romantic comedy get before the romance is no longer romantic and the comedy is no longer comedic? |
Good question. IMO - as long as the script deals with love or romance and has some comedic tone (even if the humor is dark).
Just finished the revisions on my first draft. Also a turd, but I'm in!
Posted by: Hank (Guest), January 27th, 2019, 5:45pm; Reply: 71
Quoted Text 1. How much comedy would you figure is needed to qualify as a comedy?
2. Do both sides need to see it as romantic (for example: a stalker might see a relationship as romantic, but the stalked might not...)? |
I would say considering the page limit, that if there are at least 2-3 really good funny moments found in each script, I would safely consider them comedy. In the case of the romantic side of things, I think that both (or however many) parties do not have to share feelings for each other.
Posted by: khamanna, January 27th, 2019, 6:18pm; Reply: 72
Sean, to answer your question - in my opinion, genres are super subjective. I may find it depressing and the others will say it's light and funny. So, just go for it I'll say.
Hey, people, how about we let the challenge master decide this time? I for one would say a script doesn't fit the challenge only if it severely off and doesn't have something red or chocolates or if it's doesn't fit the page length requirement.
Posted by: LC, January 27th, 2019, 6:56pm; Reply: 73
I could name more RomComs that are not rolling in the aisles stuff than are.
Something About Mary, for example, is a ComRom imho. Knocked Up genuinely cracked me up in spots but made me cringe in others.
Even Woody's material (Annie Hall) often just brings a smile of recognition with his acute observations.
If you make me quietly chuckle or smile at some point and I'm touched by the romantic element I'll be happy.
Kham has a point too. It's subjective, and dare I say the SS female audience may be impressed by stuff you guys roll your eyes at.
Now, has anyone heard from Dave?
Like I said, right up his alley and I'm looking forward to reading his entry, and Antthony's too!
Posted by: Zack, January 27th, 2019, 7:16pm; Reply: 74
My participation isn't looking so good at the moment. Really struggling with this one. I believe I have a clever idea, but I just can't seem to get it on the page. Whether I enter or not, i look forward to reading the entries.
Zack
Posted by: Warren, January 27th, 2019, 7:16pm; Reply: 75
Quoted from Dreamscale Very surprised at several things...
1) That most are saying how difficult this is.
2) That at least 2 writers are finished already, first draft or not.
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Well considering I'm one of those that is finished a first draft, I will say that I found this incredibly difficult for many reasons. I hardly ever write comedy and I don't really enjoy writing it either. And romance that's just a whole other beast, that being said, it's a long weekend here in Australia so I spent almost 7 solid hours yesterday on that first draft, and about 2 hours today making it pretty.
At this point I don't hate it, so that's a start.
Posted by: JakeJon, January 27th, 2019, 7:56pm; Reply: 76
I'm concerned over asking a "dumb ass " question. Yeah right! Would like to submit a rewrite of an old script, retrofitted to meet , what I think are, the rom-com requirements. Also it's only four pages.
If either of these are "out of bounds" I'll forego. Would still like to submit. Exclude me from the challenge results if necessary.
thnx
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 27th, 2019, 8:00pm; Reply: 77
My participation isn't looking so good at the moment. Really struggling with this one. I believe I have a clever idea, but I just can't seem to get it on the page. Whether I enter or not, i look forward to reading the entries.
Zack |
Zack, my brother...relax. It's Sunday night. Parameters were just released less than 48 hours ago!
To each their own how they write and it's why the world keeps turning, but for this Kid, I don't even intend on thinking about it yet.
I'll be in, and I'll read (at least some) of every single entry. Personally, I really like the challenge!
Posted by: Zack, January 27th, 2019, 8:06pm; Reply: 78
Quoted from Dreamscale
Zack, my brother...relax. It's Sunday night. Parameters were just released less than 48 hours ago!
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You're probably right. Lol. Maybe it'll click for me in a day or two. Just need to let it cook a little in the oven.
Zack
Posted by: Grandma Bear, January 27th, 2019, 8:08pm; Reply: 79
Would like to submit a rewrite of an old script, retrofitted to meet , what I think are, the rom-com requirements. Also it's only four pages.
If either of these are "out of bounds" I'll forego. Would still like to submit. Exclude me from the challenge results if necessary.
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The challenge is to write a new script in one week...
5-10 pages. A 4 page script would simply not be posted for the challenge.
As far as the romcom stuff goes, this is what a romcom is according to wikipedia.
Romantic comedy is a genre with light-hearted, humorous plotlines centered on romantic ideas, such as how true love is able to surmount most obstacles. One dictionary definition is "a funny movie, play, or television program about a love story that ends happily". Wikipedia
Posted by: Warren, January 27th, 2019, 8:41pm; Reply: 80
If you make me quietly chuckle or smile at some point and I'm touched by the romantic element I'll be happy.
Now, has anyone heard from Dave?
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If you quietly chuckle at how bad it is, that counts, right?
Dave has been unusually quiet on the boards all round.
Posted by: PKCardinal, January 27th, 2019, 8:42pm; Reply: 81
First draft done.
No idea what I have.
At least it's an entry.
Posted by: Hank (Guest), January 27th, 2019, 8:49pm; Reply: 82
Quoted Text I'll read (at least some) of every single entry |
I find the (at least some) part of your statement discouraging. They are going to be 10 pages at most. It should take less than ten minutes to read one. Then probably another five-to-fifteen minutes to write a review. I will be hoping to read and review every script submitted in their entirety. I don't find it that hard to commit to reading all of a script (especially a short), unless it is riddled with grammatical, spelling, formatting errors and, or is just too confusing.
Posted by: Warren, January 27th, 2019, 8:50pm; Reply: 83
First draft done.
No idea what I have.
At least it's an entry. |
Considering how dominant you've been over the course of the last few challenges, and just knowing your writing, I'd say it's safe to say you probably have a competitor.
Posted by: Warren, January 27th, 2019, 8:54pm; Reply: 84
Quoted from Hank
I find the (at least some) part of your statement discouraging. They are going to be 10 pages at most. It should take less than ten minutes to read one. Then probably another five-to-fifteen minutes to write a review. I will be hoping to read and review every script submitted in their entirety. I don't find it that hard to commit to reading all of a script (especially a short), unless it is riddled with grammatical, spelling, formatting errors and, or is just too confusing.
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This being your first OWC, you will quickly become accustomed to Jeff's... um... method?
Remember not to take any comments personally, people just have different ways of reviewing scripts.
Posted by: LC, January 27th, 2019, 10:05pm; Reply: 85
Good advice from Warren for you there, Hank.
No matter the temptation to respond to your critics, try to bite your tongue. Even overwhelmingly good scripts can get a: 'Nope, didn't do it for me.'
You can also review your own script as long as you don't inadvertently out yourself.
Posted by: Mr. Blonde, January 27th, 2019, 10:42pm; Reply: 86
Romantic comedy is a genre with light-hearted, humorous plotlines centered on romantic ideas, such as how true love is able to surmount most obstacles... "a funny program... that ends happily". |
Uh oh... Lol.
Posted by: MarkRenshaw, January 28th, 2019, 3:18am; Reply: 87
If I did enter this, I think I'd be sorely tempted (for the first time ever) to write a pisser. Proper Mills and Boon bad over the top romance buffoonery.
Posted by: Matthew Taylor, January 28th, 2019, 4:17am; Reply: 88
I'm in. Going to try and steal a few hours at work to secretly type this up.
Mine will most likely be lacking in the comedy element, but it is light hearted so we will see.
Good luck to all
Posted by: stevie, January 28th, 2019, 5:13am; Reply: 89
If I did enter this, I think I'd be sorely tempted (for the first time ever) to write a pisser. Proper Mills and Boon bad over the top romance buffoonery. |
Love Is In The Bush
Rom-com Porn Horror
Logline: A combined Super Bowl party/blind date turns bloody when Jeff finds himself in the Rams sauna room clad only in roses and chocolate.
Rated H for Hilarious
Posted by: Grandma Bear, January 28th, 2019, 9:00am; Reply: 90
Posted by: Hank (Guest), January 28th, 2019, 9:51am; Reply: 91
Thanks for the advice Warren and Libby. Sorry Jeff, sometimes I fly off the handle over things that aren't issues for most people.
I remember seeing that 'Paperman' short years ago and enjoying it a lot. Well-deserved Oscar. I forget which Disney movie it played before.
Posted by: Steven, January 28th, 2019, 9:57am; Reply: 92
This gives me a good reason to share my "Before series" styled thing I'm writing.
Posted by: khamanna, January 28th, 2019, 10:09am; Reply: 93
I haven't started yet but realized that Ican't go with my best idea as it is not comedic but very dramatic.
My other idea is medocre but I may write it after all. It may turn up being a non-intended pisser though.
Unintended pissers are the worst
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 28th, 2019, 10:15am; Reply: 94
Quoted from Hank I find the (at least some) part of your statement discouraging. They are going to be 10 pages at most. It should take less than ten minutes to read one. Then probably another five-to-fifteen minutes to write a review. I will be hoping to read and review every script submitted in their entirety. I don't find it that hard to commit to reading all of a script (especially a short), unless it is riddled with grammatical, spelling, formatting errors and, or is just too confusing. |
Hank, if you find this statement discouraging, you're in for a rood awakening once reviews and feedback begin, as very, very few peeps comment on every entry, most just hit a few, and some, don't post a single comment.
I comment on every single entry, every single time. If a script sucks balls, chances are good I'll bow out, but I will make it very clear why I'm bowing out.
We'll see if you hold to what you said here and read and comment on every single script in their entirety. Just understand, there could easily be 40 or so.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 28th, 2019, 10:16am; Reply: 95
Love Is In The Bush
Rom-com Porn Horror
Logline: A combined Super Bowl party/blind date turns bloody when Jeff finds himself in the Rams sauna room clad only in roses and chocolate.
Rated H for Hilarious
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Now that, my friend, is quite funny! You should enter, damnit! Return of Bunnyman!!!
Posted by: Hank (Guest), January 28th, 2019, 10:24am; Reply: 96
40 short scripts should take around 6 and a 1/2 hours to read, plus the time it takes to review each one. We are given close to 2 weeks to read and review. I think it will be easy for me to do.
Posted by: FrankM, January 28th, 2019, 10:32am; Reply: 97
I have the kernel of an idea, but I don't think I can get it onto a page and actually funny in time for the deadline.
Will be curious to see if anyone else goes in the direction I was thinking (won't say anything, I just might get this thing entered)
Posted by: SAC, January 28th, 2019, 11:13am; Reply: 98
Don’t wish to draw Jeff’s ire, but... Done and submitted!
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 28th, 2019, 11:29am; Reply: 99
Don’t wish to draw Jeff’s ire, but... Done and submitted! |
OH NO!!! Good luck!
Posted by: Grandma Bear, January 28th, 2019, 11:31am; Reply: 100
I think more realistically it will be somewhere between 12-20. :)
Posted by: Matthew Taylor, January 28th, 2019, 11:31am; Reply: 101
I've finished the 'puke' draft. Will need a lot of tidying up.
This is going to sound like I'm kissing ass, but thank you for this challenge. If left to my own devices, I wouldn't even think about writing a script like this - When the challenge was announced, I rolled my eyes - But I actually really enjoyed writing this one, didn't think I would.
I hope you guys have as much fun tearing it apart as I did putting it together :)
Posted by: eldave1, January 28th, 2019, 11:44am; Reply: 102
I could name more RomComs that are not rolling in the aisles stuff than are. Something About Mary, for example, is a ComRom imho. Knocked Up genuinely cracked me up in spots but made me cringe in others.
Even Woody's material (Annie Hall) often just brings a smile of recognition with his acute observations.
If you make me quietly chuckle or smile at some point and I'm touched by the romantic element I'll be happy.
Kham has a point too. It's subjective, and dare I say the SS female audience may be impressed by stuff you guys roll your eyes at.
Now, has anyone heard from Dave?
Like I said, right up his alley and I'm looking forward to reading his entry, and Antthony's too! |
Libby!
No - I was not abducted :
We've been moving my wife's Dad to live with us. He's wheelchair bound so we've been having to do a lot of accommodations (bathrooms, door widening and the like) so my time has been consumed.
I have not typed a single sentence yet but am going to try to find time.
In terms of this:
Quoted Text Now, a question of personal taste which I'm curious of all people's opinions about. How dark and depressing can a romantic comedy get before the romance is no longer romantic and the comedy is no longer comedic?
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First, comedy is subjective. For me the measure is going to be was there a genuine attempt to make me laugh or smile regardless of whether I personally do either.
Second, did the writer at least attempt to meet the spirit of the genre? e.g., If 4 pages out of the 5 focus on the horror of Zombies killing people and Valentine's day - nope. But if the story is about a couple of Zombie's celebrating Valentine's day - yep (kind of funny on it's face). I think it cold be titled "Death Will Not Do Us Part"
Dramatic elements could simply abound as well as most Romantic Comedies are full of them. In As Good as it Gets - Simon is nearly beaten to death and in another scene is horribly rejected by his parents.
The real challenge here is it being a Short. Hard to include multiple story phases in such few pages. So for me:
- Make sure you have the three elements in your story.
- Incorporate a Romantic theme
- Keep the script between five and ten pages
- Make an earnest attempt to make someone smile or laugh
Posted by: Philostrate, January 28th, 2019, 12:11pm; Reply: 103
Quoted Text I have not typed a single sentence yet but am going to try to find time. |
And yet, he's going to crush us!!! ;D
Quoted Text The real challenge here is it being a Short. Hard to include multiple story phases in such few pages. So for me:
- Make sure you have the three elements in your story. - Incorporate a Romantic theme - Keep the script between five and ten pages - Make an earnest attempt to make someone smile or laugh
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I can't agree more.
Posted by: SAC, January 28th, 2019, 12:30pm; Reply: 104
Yeah, first time I’ve ever submitted this early but I’ll be busy all week and didn’t want to take any chances. Got an idea and ran with it. Anyway, I haven’t submitted a good OWC script in almost two years. I figure this one can’t be any worse. :D
Posted by: Gary in Houston, January 28th, 2019, 1:20pm; Reply: 105
I finally have an idea! It’s about two zombies who are trying to celebrate Valentine’s Day and I’m going to call “Til Death Us Do Not Part”. I just hope no one else has a similar idea yet!
Posted by: eldave1, January 28th, 2019, 1:27pm; Reply: 106
I finally have an idea! It’s about two zombies who are trying to celebrate Valentine’s Day and I’m going to call “Til Death Us Do Not Part”. I just hope no one else has a similar idea yet! |
That sounds like a winner!
Posted by: Steven, January 28th, 2019, 2:58pm; Reply: 107
I finally have an idea! It’s about two zombies who are trying to celebrate Valentine’s Day and I’m going to call “Til Death Us Do Not Part”. I just hope no one else has a similar idea yet! |
Til Undeath Do Us Part.
Posted by: irish eyes, January 28th, 2019, 3:09pm; Reply: 108
Quoted from Shazza Clark Anyway, I haven’t submitted a good OWC script in almost two years. |
I beg to differ Sir... It's been at least 3 :D
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 28th, 2019, 3:15pm; Reply: 109
I beg to differ Sir... It's been at least 3 :D
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or 4...
;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
Posted by: SAC, January 28th, 2019, 3:48pm; Reply: 110
Give me a minute. I’m trying to think of a clever comeback.
Posted by: SAC, January 28th, 2019, 3:55pm; Reply: 111
Well, you sir (Mark), have yet to acheive the gold standard of OWC greatness: A positive review from Jeff. Over my illustrious four years as a screenwriter I have received three positive reviews from Jeff. Although he was probably schlammied on Jagermeister while sitting in his hot tub dreaming of all these voluptuous honies he’s always talking about, but in reality was sniffing a pair of Stevie’s Daisy Dukes.
Posted by: irish eyes, January 28th, 2019, 4:11pm; Reply: 112
Why don't you give yourself a few more minutes ;D;D;D
and just for the record I do believe Jeff made it to page 2... once ;D;D;D
Posted by: LC, January 28th, 2019, 5:00pm; Reply: 113
Libby!
No - I was not abducted :
We've been moving my wife's Dad to live with us. He's wheelchair bound so we've been having to do a lot of accommodations (bathrooms, door widening and the like) so my time has been consumed.
I have not typed a single sentence yet but am going to try to find time.
In terms of this:
First, comedy is subjective. For me the measure is going to be was there a genuine attempt to make me laugh or smile regardless of whether I personally do either.
Second, did the writer at least attempt to meet the spirit of the genre? e.g., If 4 pages out of the 5 focus on the horror of Zombies killing people and Valentine's day - nope. But if the story is about a couple of Zombie's celebrating Valentine's day - yep (kind of funny on it's face). I think it cold be titled "Death Will Not Do Us Part"
Dramatic elements could simply abound as well as most Romantic Comedies are full of them. In As Good as it Gets - Simon is nearly beaten to death and in another scene is horribly rejected by his parents.
The real challenge here is it being a Short. Hard to include multiple story phases in such few pages. So for me:
- Make sure you have the three elements in your story. - Incorporate a Romantic theme - Keep the script between five and ten pages - Make an earnest attempt to make someone smile or laugh
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Hey, hey, hey!
He's alive.
Hope your dad-in-law is settling in.
Goodo, on the other front. Looking forward to reading your entry which I already know will be a class act.
No pressure whatsoever.
P.S. Dave/Gary, 'Zombies In Love' was mine!
'I Love You To Bits' ;D
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Posted by: eldave1, January 28th, 2019, 5:04pm; Reply: 114
Hey, hey, hey! He's alive.
Hope your dad-in-law is settling in.
Goodo, on the other front. Looking forward to reading your entry which I already know will be a class act.
No pressure whatsoever.
P.S. Dave/Gary, 'Zombies In Love' was mine! 'I Love You To Bits' ;D '
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Better yet
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 28th, 2019, 5:19pm; Reply: 115
Well, you sir (Mark), have yet to acheive the gold standard of OWC greatness: A positive review from Jeff. Over my illustrious four years as a screenwriter I have received three positive reviews from Jeff. Although he was probably schlammied on Jagermeister while sitting in his hot tub dreaming of all these voluptuous honies he’s always talking about, but in reality was sniffing a pair of Stevie’s Daisy Dukes. |
;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D HaHa!!!
I wonder if Stevie still has those short jean shorts he's so famous for? I hope they're long retired, but knowing Stevie, I bet he still brings them out and parades around the house, thinking back to when he was "young".
Posted by: Warren, January 28th, 2019, 5:43pm; Reply: 116
P.S. Dave/Gary, 'Zombies In Love' was mine! 'I Love You To Bits' ;D '
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But in all seriousness, will we be seeing an entry from you Libby?
Posted by: Warren, January 28th, 2019, 5:45pm; Reply: 117
And yet, he's going to crush us!!! ;D
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My thoughts exactly, or Paul. I imagine both will be hard to best.
Posted by: LC, January 28th, 2019, 5:52pm; Reply: 118
But in all seriousness, will we be seeing an entry from you Libby? |
I think so. I hope so...
Couple ideas swirling around. ::)
Posted by: ReneC, January 28th, 2019, 10:38pm; Reply: 119
Aw, nuts. I overshot the mark. I was aiming for 12 pages for some reason...
Now I need to cut something.
Posted by: stevie, January 28th, 2019, 11:12pm; Reply: 120
Aw, nuts. I overshot the mark. I was aiming for 12 pages for some reason...
Now I need to cut something. |
Orphan check bro or else Out By Page One Man will be after ya😂😂😂
Posted by: ReneC, January 29th, 2019, 1:43am; Reply: 121
Orphan check bro or else Out By Page One Man will be after ya😂😂😂
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Tell me about it. ::)
Got it down to 10 and two-eighths. I think I’ll leave an orphan or two just to give him something to gripe about.
Posted by: Scar Tissue Films, January 29th, 2019, 4:40am; Reply: 122
Well, I'm out.
Go a couple of fairly funny scenes, but still can't get a basic premise together.
Good luck to all.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 29th, 2019, 7:17am; Reply: 123
Looks like I'm out.
9 1/2 pages, perfectly formatted, great characters, amazing story/plot, shockingly romantic and funny as Hell.
The problem is that it's just way too good to submit and I don't want to make everyone else look so bad.
I guess I could add some orphans, misspell some words, change some Slugs so they're completely senseless, and just basically make it look like the others will, but I don't want to write a pisser...or...should I?
;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
Posted by: ReneC, January 29th, 2019, 11:15am; Reply: 124
Quoted from Dreamscale Looks like I'm out.
9 1/2 pages, perfectly formatted, great characters, amazing story/plot, shockingly romantic and funny as Hell.
The problem is that it's just way too good to submit and I don't want to make everyone else look so bad.
I guess I could add some orphans, misspell some words, change some Slugs so they're completely senseless, and just basically make it look like the others will, but I don't want to write a pisser...or...should I?
;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D |
Wake up, Jeff! You're having that crazy dream again!
Posted by: irish eyes, January 29th, 2019, 1:48pm; Reply: 125
Quoted from Mr Bush Looks like I'm out. I just saw a preview of Mark's(Irisheyes) script
9 1/2 pages, perfectly formatted, great characters, amazing story/plot, shockingly romantic and funny as Hell.
The problem is that it's just way too good to submit and he's gonna make everyone else look so bad. |
Finally a glowing review ;D;D;D
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 29th, 2019, 1:52pm; Reply: 126
HA!!! Yes!
I hope to throw out a bunch of glowing reviews, and after my Rams decimate the Patriots on Sunday, I'll be in a very giving mood.
Posted by: eldave1, January 29th, 2019, 1:58pm; Reply: 127
Quoted from Dreamscale Looks like I'm out.
9 1/2 pages, perfectly formatted, great characters, amazing story/plot, shockingly romantic and funny as Hell.
The problem is that it's just way too good to submit and I don't want to make everyone else look so bad.
I guess I could add some orphans, misspell some words, change some Slugs so they're completely senseless, and just basically make it look like the others will, but I don't want to write a pisser...or...should I?
;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D |
Perfectly formatted. How could you not submit????? Oscar please....
Posted by: SAC, January 29th, 2019, 2:07pm; Reply: 128
Finally a glowing review ;D;D;D
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Umm... That would be the opposite of a review on one of yours. Yours reviews normally include, in no specific order...
I’m out
Are you serious?
Not for me
Made absolutely no sense
Reads like a pisser
Etc, etc, etc...
Posted by: eldave1, January 29th, 2019, 2:26pm; Reply: 129
Quoted from Dreamscale HA!!! Yes!
I hope to throw out a bunch of glowing reviews, and after my Rams decimate the Patriots on Sunday, I'll be in a very giving mood. |
I am from L.A and heavily rooting for the Rams - alas - I think the Patriots will win
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 29th, 2019, 3:51pm; Reply: 130
Perfectly formatted. How could you not submit????? Oscar please....
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I jest...I jest...on the not submitting part, at least.
;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
Posted by: Gary in Houston, January 29th, 2019, 5:17pm; Reply: 131
I think people will find mine mildly amusing but not LOL funny. But i feel like most of the rom com’s I’ve seen would fall into that description.
On another note, i could see a large percentage of these shorts actually getting made.
Posted by: LC, January 29th, 2019, 5:38pm; Reply: 132
... On another note, i could see a large percentage of these shorts actually getting made. |
Now, there's a supreme optimist!
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 29th, 2019, 6:02pm; Reply: 133
OK, I guess I better start thinking about this thing. Hopefully, I can get it going tomorrow.
I'm planning on entering at least 2, one being a sequel to an earlier short romcom of mine from an OWC long, long ago.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 29th, 2019, 7:47pm; Reply: 134
Quoted from Dreamscale OK, I guess I better start thinking about this thing. Hopefully, I can get it going tomorrow.
I'm planning on entering at least 2, one being a sequel to an earlier short romcom of mine from an OWC long, long ago. |
And maybe a 3rd about Stevie and the tale of the short shorts. :o :o :o
Posted by: Zack, January 29th, 2019, 8:04pm; Reply: 135
Gonna throw in the towel on this one. I've started and restarted three separate times. My idea was about a stupid Vampire who is in love with the sun. Also had an idea about prison love told from the perspective of a bar of soap. But nothing was coming together for me.
It's just not clicking and I don't want to wast anyone's time with a half-assed entry. This just isn't my genre. Lol. That said, I will try to read and review every entry. Really looking forward to seeing what you guys come up with.
Zack
Posted by: Warren, January 29th, 2019, 8:06pm; Reply: 136
Quoted from Dreamscale Looks like I'm out.
9 1/2 pages, perfectly formatted, great characters, amazing story/plot, shockingly romantic and funny as Hell.
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I'm definitely interested to see if anyone other than you has a perfectly formatted script... in your opinion. Has anyone?
Posted by: Warren, January 29th, 2019, 8:13pm; Reply: 137
Dustin has been awfully quiet. Does he not know, or is he planning a surprise attack?
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 29th, 2019, 8:22pm; Reply: 138
I'm definitely interested to see if anyone other than you has a perfectly formatted script... in your opinion. Has anyone? |
For 5-10 pages? Easy, bro.
Perfect...as in "perfect"? No, probably impossible, in reality in just a week, but "perfect" from a 1 quick read? Pretty easy, actually.
Shockingly, I'm nat prefect iether. ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
Posted by: JEStaats, January 29th, 2019, 8:41pm; Reply: 139
I'm ashamed to say that I'm out on this one too. I've been stewing about this for days and only have two really weak stories that have no middle or end. The beginning even sucks too. Sigh.
I'm right there with Zack and will read/comment as many as possible. Good luck everyone.
Posted by: khamanna, January 29th, 2019, 8:59pm; Reply: 140
I haven't started either and I'm getting lazier by the minute. Probably won't be writing for this one which is a shame as it's a fun one.
Yeah, Warren I'm with you on Dustin. And he loves romcoms I hear.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 29th, 2019, 9:09pm; Reply: 141
I haven't started either and I'm getting lazier by the minute. Probably won't be writing for this one which is a shame as it's a fun one.
Yeah, Warren I'm with you on Dustin. And he loves romcoms I hear. |
Dusty for RomComs? Really? It would be a drug injected mean spirited, sad tale.
C'mon, Dustin...prove me wrong, Brother!!
Posted by: eldave1, January 29th, 2019, 9:12pm; Reply: 142
Gonna throw in the towel on this one. I've started and restarted three separate times. My idea was about a stupid Vampire who is in love with the sun. Also had an idea about prison love told from the perspective of a bar of soap. But nothing was coming together for me.
It's just not clicking and I don't want to wast anyone's time with a half-assed entry. This just isn't my genre. Lol. That said, I will try to read and review every entry. Really looking forward to seeing what you guys come up with.
Zack |
Half ass? I got a pull it out of the ass :)
Actually think you may have been close on the vampire one other than the sun thing - maybe a girl that only is available during daylight....
Posted by: eldave1, January 29th, 2019, 9:16pm; Reply: 143
I'm definitely interested to see if anyone other than you has a perfectly formatted script... in your opinion. Has anyone?
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Not sure anyone other than Jeff has ever cared.
Posted by: LC, January 29th, 2019, 9:19pm; Reply: 144
Actually think you may have been close on the vampire one other than the sun thing - maybe a girl that only is available during daylight.... |
Now that's an idea! Romance, pathos. One lives in the darkness, and one in the light. Get on it, Zack.
Posted by: Pale Yellow, January 29th, 2019, 9:26pm; Reply: 145
I have not started ... need to ask the Mod a question... to make sure my idea fits as a rom/com.
Posted by: eldave1, January 29th, 2019, 9:42pm; Reply: 146
Now that's an idea! Romance, pathos. One lives in the darkness, and one in the light. Get on it, Zack.
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Would like to see it
Posted by: Zack, January 29th, 2019, 9:54pm; Reply: 147
A stupid Vampire is in love with a girl who is deathly afraid of the dark. Haha. Too late now. Cat's out of the bag. Maybe I'll write it for something separate. :P Thanks guys.
Zack
Posted by: eldave1, January 29th, 2019, 10:00pm; Reply: 148
A stupid Vampire is in love with a girl who is deathly afraid of the dark. Haha. Too late now. Cat's out of the bag. Maybe I'll write it for something separate. :P Thanks guys.
Zack |
Look forward to seeing it someday
Posted by: ReneC, January 30th, 2019, 1:32am; Reply: 149
Now that's an idea! Romance, pathos. One lives in the darkness, and one in the light. Get on it, Zack.
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So...Ladyhawke. But a rom com.
Posted by: Matthew Taylor, January 30th, 2019, 7:26am; Reply: 150
My idea was about a stupid Vampire who is in love with the sun. |
That sounds amazing! You should have ran with that - Would have been interesting to see how you would have incorporated roses and chocolates.
Posted by: Zack, January 30th, 2019, 7:45am; Reply: 151
That sounds amazing! You should have ran with that - Would have been interesting to see how you would have incorporated roses and chocolates.
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That was my biggest issue. Couldn't fit them into the plot. They were merely just props.
Zack
Posted by: Matthew Taylor, January 30th, 2019, 7:51am; Reply: 152
Could have had the vampire leave some chocolate outside as an "offering" to the Sun - but the Sun melts the chocolate, upsetting the vampire as he/she thinks the sun didn't like it
Roses - no idea
On a different note - When the challenge is over, and my entry gets absolutely ridiculed, am I allowed to stay anonymous?
Posted by: SAC, January 30th, 2019, 7:53am; Reply: 153
Could have had the vampire leave some chocolate outside as an "offering" to the Sun - but the Sun melts the chocolate, upsetting the vampire as he/she thinks the sun didn't like it
Roses - no idea
On a different note - When the challenge is over, and my entry gets absolutely ridiculed, am I allowed to stay anonymous? |
No.
Posted by: LC, January 30th, 2019, 7:57am; Reply: 154
...On a different note - When the challenge is over, and my entry gets absolutely ridiculed, am I allowed to stay anonymous? |
Are you being funny, Steven Clark?
Matt, yes, you can let Don know you want your name to remain anonymous before the reveal. Seen it before with the odd writer here and there. Bugged the heck outta me that I didn't know who wrote a certain something. :)
You can also request your script be removed too, if you want.
Posted by: Matthew Taylor, January 30th, 2019, 8:01am; Reply: 155
Are you being funny, Steven Clark?
Matt, yes, you can let Don know you want your name to remain anonymous before the reveal. Seen it before with the odd writer here and there. Bugged the heck outta me that I didn't know who wrote a certain something. :)
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I was only joking - all my work gets ridiculed lol
Plus, would be bloody obvious since there would be only 1 anonymous entry and my name would be missing from the rest of the list lol
Posted by: LC, January 30th, 2019, 8:03am; Reply: 156
Not necessarily...
You could always claim you piked out prior.
Anyway, good to hear you're going for it.
Posted by: SAC, January 30th, 2019, 9:10am; Reply: 157
We all gotta take it when our work stinks. I should know.
Posted by: jayrex, January 30th, 2019, 9:51am; Reply: 158
We all gotta take it when our work stinks. I should know. |
I don’t think my work has ever resonated with anyone. It’s consistently hit a bum note with most people. I still try though.
Posted by: SAC, January 30th, 2019, 10:29am; Reply: 159
I don’t think my work has ever resonated with anyone. It’s consistently hit a bum note with most people. I still try though.
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And that’s the great thing about this site, and continuously trying and writing and reading more. The more you do it the more you learn, and the better your work will be. It’s finding that connection.
Posted by: jayrex, January 30th, 2019, 1:13pm; Reply: 160
Got through most of it. There were some silly things and some interesting things, IMO.
Example of silly thing - concluding that rushed submittals result in lower scores since those submitted nearest the deadline scored worse. Obviously - submitting close to the deadline could be the polar opposite - one waited as long as possible in order to fine tune.
Some Interesting things.
- Curse words were popular - the filthier the better. I would have never had considered this.
- In almost every genre, originality was not deemed important. I would have thought the inverse would be true. Could be old ideas well executed are just fine.
- Readers don't care about parenthetical s (always suspected that).
etc.
Not sure what it all means in it's entirety but there was some food for thought as well as some stuff to discard. |
Just a guess, multiple Simplscript tabs open?
Posted by: eldave1, January 30th, 2019, 1:34pm; Reply: 161
Just a guess, multiple Simplscript tabs open?
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oooooops!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: eldave1, January 30th, 2019, 1:37pm; Reply: 162
And that’s the great thing about this site, and continuously trying and writing and reading more. The more you do it the more you learn, and the better your work will be. It’s finding that connection.
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Dead on
Posted by: PKCardinal, January 30th, 2019, 3:06pm; Reply: 163
That was embarrassing. You probably shouldn't submit to the OWC... you know, to recover from the shame. :)
Posted by: eldave1, January 30th, 2019, 3:15pm; Reply: 164
That was embarrassing. You probably shouldn't submit to the OWC... you know, to recover from the shame. :)
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Concur. In fact have to double check to make sure I didn't submit a post rather than a script.
Posted by: PKCardinal, January 30th, 2019, 3:34pm; Reply: 165
Concur. In fact have to double check to make sure I didn't submit a post rather than a script.
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As long as your post included roses, chocolates and something red... you'll probably dust us with that, too.
Posted by: eldave1, January 30th, 2019, 3:47pm; Reply: 166
As long as your post included roses, chocolates and something red... you'll probably dust us with that, too.
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Wait - got to have roses, chocolate and red??? Damn!
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 30th, 2019, 5:24pm; Reply: 167
Mine has no roses, no chocolate, and absolutely nothing red. I swear!
But then again, it has zero words written still...
;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
Posted by: Sandra Elstree., January 30th, 2019, 5:37pm; Reply: 168
Quoted from Dreamscale Mine has no roses, no chocolate, and absolutely nothing red. I swear!
But then again, it has zero words written still...
;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D |
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I admire you, Jeff. I wish I had your brazen charm and skill at pulling something together so fast!
I only realized today that I forgot the chocolate. How could I forget the chocolate?!
Sandra
Posted by: jayrex, January 30th, 2019, 5:59pm; Reply: 169
I might a script or two ready.
Posted by: LC, January 30th, 2019, 6:15pm; Reply: 170
I only realized today that I forgot the chocolate. How could I forget the chocolate?!... |
Sounds like a line out of a RomCom. ;D
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 30th, 2019, 8:41pm; Reply: 171
Sounds like a line out of a RomCom. ;D
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I may have to use that line!
The real ,question, though, is...will 1 of my characters say, "You get me?"?
HA!!! I NEED TO GET STARTED!!!! FRICK FRACK!!! (see, Libby...I didn't even swear!!
:P :P :P :P :P :P :P :P
Posted by: SAC, January 30th, 2019, 8:47pm; Reply: 172
Quoted from Dreamscale
HA!!! I NEED TO GET STARTED!!!! FRICK FRACK!!!
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You should’ve done like I did — write it Sunday night, glossed it over, and submitted Monday. No frick, frack, frick over here.
Posted by: Grandma Bear, January 30th, 2019, 8:50pm; Reply: 173
Quoted from Dreamscale
The real ,question, though, is...will 1 of my characters say, "You get me?"?
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I've actually used that in a script! :D
Posted by: Gary in Houston, January 30th, 2019, 9:13pm; Reply: 174
I've actually used that in a script! :D
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--Quickly deletes some dialogue from my script
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 30th, 2019, 9:43pm; Reply: 175
I've actually used that in a script! :D |
HA!! I try to use it in EVERY SCRIPT!!!!!!
Posted by: Talldave, January 30th, 2019, 10:29pm; Reply: 176
i got my script ready for submission...now to give it the ole 48 hour cool off before I submit.
Posted by: khamanna, January 31st, 2019, 1:12am; Reply: 177
I started writing mine!
I shouldn't have.
Posted by: khamanna, January 31st, 2019, 1:13am; Reply: 178
I only realized today that I forgot the chocolate. How could I forget the chocolate?!
Sandra
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Just have them in next to your flowers that's all. Why not?
Posted by: IamGlenn, January 31st, 2019, 9:25am; Reply: 179
I've had an idea all week. Not very funny, pretty romantic. Think I'll go with it.
Gonna start tonight.
Posted by: Gary in Houston, January 31st, 2019, 11:19am; Reply: 180
I went back and reread mine and it’s god awful. Doesn’t make any sense. I may be too embarrassed to enter it, even though one of 2019 goals was to enter at least two challenges. Damn goal setting!!
Posted by: ReneC, January 31st, 2019, 11:36am; Reply: 181
I went back and reread mine and it’s god awful. Doesn’t make any sense. I may be too embarrassed to enter it, even though one of 2019 goals was to enter at least two challenges. Damn goal setting!! |
There's still time to massage it a bit, but submit it. Even if you take a licking, you'll be halfway to reaching your goal. And who knows, SS might close next month, and then what will you do? ;)
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 31st, 2019, 11:58am; Reply: 182
I went back and reread mine and it’s god awful. Doesn’t make any sense. I may be too embarrassed to enter it, even though one of 2019 goals was to enter at least two challenges. Damn goal setting!! |
Sometimes those are the most entertaining scripts!
There is plenty of time left. I still haven't even opened up my screenwriting software. I hope to soon, but it won't be for several hours at best.
Posted by: Conz, January 31st, 2019, 12:18pm; Reply: 183
ok, been a while but I think I'm get in under the wire on this one.
Posted by: jayrex, January 31st, 2019, 12:39pm; Reply: 184
Quoted from Dreamscale
Sometimes those are the most entertaining scripts!
There is plenty of time left. I still haven't even opened up my screenwriting software. I hope to soon, but it won't be for several hours at best.
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You won’t be disappointed with my effort.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 31st, 2019, 12:53pm; Reply: 185
You won’t be disappointed with my effort. |
;D ;D ;D ;D
Posted by: ReneC, January 31st, 2019, 12:53pm; Reply: 186
Quoted from Dreamscale There is plenty of time left. I still haven't even opened up my screenwriting software. I hope to soon, but it won't be for several hours at best.
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Get it done today, man. We all know once you hit the Jaeger tomorrow you won't finish it. ::)
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 31st, 2019, 1:13pm; Reply: 187
Get it done today, man. We all know once you hit the Jaeger tomorrow you won't finish it. ::) |
What about when I hit the Jagie today?
Posted by: Grandma Bear, January 31st, 2019, 1:33pm; Reply: 188
Write when you're drunk, edit when you're sober, Jeff. ;D
Posted by: khamanna, January 31st, 2019, 1:35pm; Reply: 189
I went back and reread mine and it’s god awful. Doesn’t make any sense. I may be too embarrassed to enter it, even though one of 2019 goals was to enter at least two challenges. Damn goal setting!! |
Don' t worry. My entry will totally have your back. I started reading it and wondered what I was trying to say there.
Posted by: jayrex, January 31st, 2019, 2:24pm; Reply: 190
Submitted one.
Now I need to tweak another one I wrote a week ago. May submit twice.
Posted by: khamanna, January 31st, 2019, 2:45pm; Reply: 191
Good, Xavier, can't wait to read it.
As to my entry - man, it's "and something red". Overlooked that part. What if I have red roses, will that count?
Posted by: jayrex, January 31st, 2019, 2:56pm; Reply: 192
Good, Xavier, can't wait to read it.
As to my entry - man, it's "and something red". Overlooked that part. What if I have red roses, will that count? |
You could use Cadbury's Roses.
Chocolates called roses packaged in blue & red. Time saver.
Posted by: khamanna, January 31st, 2019, 3:14pm; Reply: 193
You could use Cadbury's Roses.
Chocolates called roses packaged in blue & red. Time saver.
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I think a bunch of nice writers will call me a cheater. Writers are no pussycats you know. Or are they.
Posted by: James McClung, January 31st, 2019, 3:36pm; Reply: 194
I may or may not be out. I have a concept that meets all criteria for the challenge and a pile of notes. It's still got issues, and I expect the lack of time remaining may hurt the execution. The script will be written regardless, and I plan on posting a polished version at a later date if I miss the deadline. I also plan on reviewing entries whether or not I enter myself.
Posted by: FrankM, January 31st, 2019, 3:50pm; Reply: 195
I may or may not be out. I have a concept that meets all criteria for the challenge and a pile of notes. It's still got issues, and I expect the lack of time remaining may hurt the execution. The script will be written regardless, and I plan on posting a polished version at a later date if I miss the deadline. I also plan on reviewing entries whether or not I enter myself. |
I am in a similar boat.
Except my boat is red and full of roses and chocolates.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 31st, 2019, 4:01pm; Reply: 196
Update...
I have "FADE IN:" on the page now.
It's too early to start drinking, but maybe I need to. I've got to get this thing going!!!
Posted by: irish eyes, January 31st, 2019, 4:05pm; Reply: 197
Quoted from Gary I went back and reread mine and it’s god awful. Doesn’t make any sense. I may be too embarrassed to enter it, even though one of 2019 goals was to enter at least two challenges. Damn goal setting! |
Quoted from Khamanna Don' t worry. My entry will totally have your back. I started reading it and wondered what I was trying to say there. |
I like it guys a little bit of reverse Psychology.
That way if it does get slammed you're already covered with "i told you so" ;D
Don't worry my entry is really shit too ;)
i mean you'll be able to smell the stench coming through your laptop when you read it ;D;D;D
Posted by: Matthew Taylor, January 31st, 2019, 4:31pm; Reply: 198
we are writing Rom-Coms, they are going to suck regardless.
Think I'm done with mine. I keep rewriting it, but at this point all i'm doing is sprinkling glitter on shit.
I'm actually not feeling to bad about it, but I know that as soon as I start reading other entries I'm gonna have an "uh oh..." moment
Posted by: eldave1, January 31st, 2019, 5:31pm; Reply: 199
we are writing Rom-Coms, they are going to suck regardless.
Think I'm done with mine. I keep rewriting it, but at this point all i'm doing is sprinkling glitter on shit.
I'm actually not feeling to bad about it, but I know that as soon as I start reading other entries I'm gonna have an "uh oh..." moment |
They are going to be tough. The Rom part is easy. The Com part is tough!!!. Especially in a short. In a feature you have more time to establish your characters and situations and get a chance to get some laughs out of the situations you put them in. That's a high bar in a five to ten pager.
Like I said before, I am expecting to smile more than to laugh with these and hope peeps are not too tough on the comedic element because humor is so subjective in the first place.
Posted by: FrankM, January 31st, 2019, 5:37pm; Reply: 200
They are going to be tough. The Rom part is easy. The Com part is tough!!!. Especially in a short. In a feature you have more time to establish your characters and situations and get a chance to get some laughs out of the situations you put them in. That's a high bar in a five to ten pager.
Like I said before, I am expecting to smile more than to laugh with these and hope peeps are not too tough on the comedic element because humor is so subjective in the first place. |
I didn’t find this post funny at all, but the two paragraphs did have good chemistry with each other. That’s quite impressive for such a short piece.
Posted by: eldave1, January 31st, 2019, 5:43pm; Reply: 201
I didn’t find this post funny at all, but the two paragraphs did have good chemistry with each other. That’s quite impressive for such a short piece.
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Well done!
Posted by: LC, January 31st, 2019, 5:56pm; Reply: 202
Honestly, you Dave, and you, Frank ,should team up together...
Apart from my hubby you two crack me up on a regular basis. :D
P.S. Romantic comedy (also known as the portmanteaus romedy or romcom) is a genre with light-hearted, humorous plotlines centered on romantic ideas, such as how true love is able to surmount most obstacles.[1] One dictionary definition is "a funny movie, play, or television program about a love story that ends happily".[2] Another definition suggests that its "primary distinguishing feature is a love plot in which two sympathetic and well-matched lovers are united or reconciled" wiki btw.
We're not writing screwball here.
Of course I'm only posting that cause if I'm lucky enough to even get something up I don't want to ready: Nope, not funny, not funny enough! Pre-emptive strike. ;)
Posted by: khamanna, January 31st, 2019, 5:59pm; Reply: 203
I cannot decide which of the two I make red - roses or chocolates. I feel like it's important and may decide against submitting for that very reason.
Posted by: ReneC, January 31st, 2019, 6:00pm; Reply: 204
Rom coms aren't comedies. The comedy is the light tone, the chuckles, the anticipation without a ton of tension. Romantic movies are pure emotion and heart, rom coms lighten things up a bit.
At least, that's how I approached mine and how I'm going to be reading them.
And, for the record, this is my very first attempt at anything in this genre. I'm honestly happy I even came up with something that seems to fit, and I look forward to getting thoroughly flogged in the reviews. ;D
Posted by: LC, January 31st, 2019, 6:00pm; Reply: 205
Kham, how about cherry flavoured chocolate roses? :)
Posted by: ReneC, January 31st, 2019, 6:01pm; Reply: 206
Honestly, you Dave, and you, Frank ,should team up together...
Apart from my hubby you two crack me up on a regular basis. :D
P.S. Romantic comedy (also known as the portmanteaus romedy or romcom) is a genre with light-hearted, humorous plotlines centered on romantic ideas, such as how true love is able to surmount most obstacles.[1] One dictionary definition is "a funny movie, play, or television program about a love story that ends happily".[2] Another definition suggests that its "primary distinguishing feature is a love plot in which two sympathetic and well-matched lovers are united or reconciled" wiki btw.
We're not writing screwball here. Of course I'm only posting that cause if I'm lucky enough to even get something up I don't want to ready: Nope, not funny, not funny enough! Pre-emptive strike. ;) |
What she said. :D
Posted by: LC, January 31st, 2019, 6:05pm; Reply: 207
Rom coms aren't comedies. The comedy is the light tone, the chuckles, the anticipation without a ton of tension. Romantic movies are pure emotion and heart, rom coms lighten things up a bit.
At least, that's how I approached mine and how I'm going to be reading them.
And, for the record, this is my very first attempt at anything in this genre. I'm honestly happy I even came up with something that seems to fit, and I look forward to getting thoroughly flogged in the reviews. ;D |
Ouch, I hit the wrong button.
Anyway, what Rene said!
'Cept I got nothing yet.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 31st, 2019, 6:10pm; Reply: 208
Time to drink here!
I have a couple pages and I know where I'm going. I've been laughing my arse off every time I reread what I have, but then again, my kind of humor isn't for everyone.
I'll get mine done, but I doubt it goes over as well as I had planned.
Time for a shot of Jagie!!!
Posted by: Zack, January 31st, 2019, 6:13pm; Reply: 209
Quoted from Dreamscale Time to drink here!
I have a couple pages and I know where I'm going. I've been laughing my arse off every time I reread what I have, but then again, my kind of humor isn't for everyone.
I'll get mine done, but I doubt it goes over as well as I had planned.
Time for a shot of Jagie!!! |
Now I'm starting to get excited. ;D ;D
Zack
Posted by: eldave1, January 31st, 2019, 6:14pm; Reply: 210
We're not writing screwball here.
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Great - the title of my script was Screwball. Back to the drawing board!
Posted by: eldave1, January 31st, 2019, 6:15pm; Reply: 211
I cannot decide which of the two I make red - roses or chocolates. I feel like it's important and may decide against submitting for that very reason. |
Red whine??
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 31st, 2019, 6:44pm; Reply: 212
3 shots down and finishing up drink #1.
so far, only 3 characters have used the line, "You get me", so I'm feeling pretty positive at this point.
Zack, are you in? Come on, man...you can do it!!!
Posted by: Warren, January 31st, 2019, 8:20pm; Reply: 213
I'm actually really excited to get the reading underway. I'm pretty sure mine is going to get brutalised but it was a fun challenge and I'm looking forward to reading some super cheesy scripts.
I suppose I better submit this damn thing.
Posted by: Zack, January 31st, 2019, 8:38pm; Reply: 214
Quoted from Dreamscale
Zack, are you in? Come on, man...you can do it!!!
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It's not looking to good for me. I suck at comedy. Lol.
Zack
Posted by: Gary in Houston, January 31st, 2019, 8:46pm; Reply: 215
Two pages to go. Two lousy pages. Have the ending in mind but can't seem to write it. Brain has gone dead. Think I'm going to have to outsource those pages to Paul or Dave.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 31st, 2019, 8:50pm; Reply: 216
Rocking along over here. Very schlammied, but I'm loving what I've got so far.
Problem will be the female readers, most likely. HA!! ;D ;D ;D
I jest...I jest. Actually, for once I think I came up with a nonabrasive, PG 13 rated script.
No nudity, no drugs, and no swearing. What? Could it be? YES!!!
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 31st, 2019, 8:52pm; Reply: 217
It's not looking to good for me. I suck at comedy. Lol. Zack
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Zack, have faith, my good man. Yuo can do it...but...you have to just do it.
If it's not funny to some, who the fuck cares? Trust me, although I laugh my arse off at stuff, others don't find it remotely funny. My girlfriend thinks I'm nuts sometimes...but, that's why she's my girl, cuz at least sometimes, she does find it funny! HA!!!
Posted by: Sandra Elstree., January 31st, 2019, 9:00pm; Reply: 218
Ouch, I hit the wrong button.
Anyway, what Rene said! 'Cept I got nothing yet.
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A Turn on Randy Bachman of Bachman-Turner Overdrive...
Maybe it gets us thinking:
Rock Star desperate for a new song falls in love with a poet for the wrong reasons, but then discovers his love is real, but she tests him by not supplying a single bit of verse.
I ain’t got nothin’ yet. B-B-B Baby I ain’t got nothin’ yet.
Just a couple of lines that tomorrow I’ll forget...
Any love is good love, so I took what I could get, yes I took what I could get.
Ooh, she looked at me with big brown eyes and said...
I ain't got nothin' yet...Hey, that is a good idea! To bad I didn't think of it earlier.
Sandra :)
Posted by: khamanna, January 31st, 2019, 9:09pm; Reply: 219
Kham, how about cherry flavoured chocolate roses? :) |
Yes. And blood is also red! I could just inject the short with some Tarantino scenes.
Posted by: khamanna, January 31st, 2019, 9:11pm; Reply: 220
Yes.
Oh, I'm excited. I sense a lot of cheese!
Posted by: Zack, January 31st, 2019, 9:16pm; Reply: 221
Quoted from Dreamscale
Zack, have faith, my good man. Yuo can do it...but...you have to just do it.
If it's not funny to some, who the fuck cares? Trust me, although I laugh my arse off at stuff, others don't find it remotely funny. My girlfriend thinks I'm nuts sometimes...but, that's why she's my girl, cuz at least sometimes, she does find it funny! HA!!!
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Alright. An idea just hit me and I'm just gonna run with it. I apologize for this mess ahead of time. ;D ;D ;D
Zack
Posted by: Grandma Bear, January 31st, 2019, 9:21pm; Reply: 222
I can think of a lot of things red. Maybe someone is infatuated with someone with red hair. Red lingerie. Red toys, of some sort... Blood can be used in humorous ways. Super Blood Moon. A red light that's not changing. An ambulance or firetruck. Need I go on? :)
Posted by: Talldave, January 31st, 2019, 10:07pm; Reply: 223
Alright. An idea just hit me and I'm just gonna run with it. I apologize for this mess ahead of time. ;D ;D ;D
Zack
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Don't worry, there'll be plenty of mess to go around, I've got enough to fill MC Hammer's parachute pants.
Posted by: Sandra Elstree., January 31st, 2019, 10:10pm; Reply: 224
I can think of a lot of things red. Maybe someone is infatuated with someone with red hair. Red lingerie. Red toys, of some sort... Blood can be used in humorous ways. Super Blood Moon. A red light that's not changing. An ambulance or firetruck. Need I go on? :) |
I like the idea of a red light that's not changing.
There's a whole lot you could write in that one moment of sitting in your car and time expands.
It would be a fun experiment to see how much we can jot down, (physically or mentally) when we're merely "waiting". :)
Sandra
Posted by: SAC, January 31st, 2019, 10:39pm; Reply: 225
Okay, so I did find time to rewrite. Submitted. Can't wait to read these!
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 31st, 2019, 10:40pm; Reply: 226
So...just let my girlfriend read what I had so far, and after 2 pages, she was obviously upset and tried to walk away. After my best romantic niceness, I begged her to just finish, which she did. I didn't have any roses or chocolate to giver her...
She's been really pissed ever since and said there's not 1 single funny anything in the script.
Well...I beg to differ. This could be a rough OWC, and I am prepared for it.
ARGH!!!!!!
Posted by: Gary in Houston, January 31st, 2019, 11:21pm; Reply: 227
Finished. Both the script and as a writer. Ugh.
But I will submit. BUT YOU CAN'T MAKE ME LIKE IT!
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), January 31st, 2019, 11:30pm; Reply: 228
Finished. Both the script and as a writer. Ugh.
But I will submit. BUT YOU CAN'T MAKE ME LIKE IT! |
Good job! I bet your significant other isn't sleeping in a spare bedroom, though, right?
FUCK!!! I'm so PISSED!!!
Posted by: Zack, February 1st, 2019, 12:50am; Reply: 229
Quoted from Dreamscale
Good job! I bet your significant other isn't sleeping in a spare bedroom, though, right?
FUCK!!! I'm so PISSED!!!
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Damn, now I'm REALLY looking forward to your entry. ;D At least the booze will keep you warm tonight, old buddy.
Zack
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 1:02am; Reply: 230
Damn, now I'm REALLY looking forward to your entry. ;D At least the booze will keep you warm tonight, old buddy.Zack
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Yeah....I'm warm. All done, but need to clean up the finale tomorrow.
I'm not happy, though. Total BS. Horrible tude from the GF. So, 13 kids died. Or the 4 cats 6 dogs. Really? No swearing, no sex, no nudity? That's a gold medal I should have gotten....or maybe a B....no...not going there.
G'night! ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
Posted by: Zack, February 1st, 2019, 1:19am; Reply: 231
Quoted from Dreamscale
Yeah....I'm warm. All done, but need to clean up the finale tomorrow.
I'm not happy, though. Total BS. Horrible tude from the GF. So, 13 kids died. Or the 4 cats 6 dogs. Really? No swearing, no sex, no nudity? That's a gold medal I should have gotten....or maybe a B....no...not going there.
G'night! ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
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If it makes you feel any better, my girlfriend hates ALL of my scripts. Well... at least she would if she existed. ;D
Zack
Posted by: Zack, February 1st, 2019, 2:51am; Reply: 232
Okay. I've finished a rough draft. And... Well... Fuck. I've got a messed up sense of humor. And an even weirder sense of romance. Not sure if I should be proud or ashamed. Guess I'm feeling a little of both. Lol. Seriously guys. I apologize in advance.
Zack
Posted by: Warren, February 1st, 2019, 4:01am; Reply: 233
Submitted, let the games begin:)
Posted by: IamGlenn, February 1st, 2019, 7:35am; Reply: 234
I can't write comedy and romance together. I had to get a little weird.
As this will be the first OWC I've entered in a while, I'm excited.
G'luck.
Posted by: FrankM, February 1st, 2019, 8:50am; Reply: 235
Sorry to say, my red boat full of roses and chocolates is stuck at the dock... simply could not find time this week to get it into story form.
I’ll post the proto-idea after the deadline because I’m curious if anyone else had a similar idea and don’t want to sound like I copied anyone.
Posted by: LC, February 1st, 2019, 8:54am; Reply: 236
Sorry to say, my red boat full of roses and chocolates is stuck at the dock... simply could not find time this week to get it into story form.
I’ll post the proto-idea after the deadline because I’m curious if anyone else had a similar idea and don’t want to sound like I copied anyone. |
Same here. Had three ideas that got marooned half way out. Will do the same.
Disappointed.
Posted by: irish eyes, February 1st, 2019, 8:58am; Reply: 237
Looking forward to reading the scripts from all the talented creative minds out there.
Seems like we might have a pretty decent turnout.
Posted by: Grandma Bear, February 1st, 2019, 9:13am; Reply: 238
And for all of you who are bailing, realize that you're just getting Jeff a bigger chance to win!!! ;D;D;D;D;D
Posted by: Pale Yellow, February 1st, 2019, 9:19am; Reply: 239
OMG just realized there is only 14 more hours! ACK! I forgot! Maybe I'll stop my WIP today to get one in...
Posted by: Gary in Houston, February 1st, 2019, 10:03am; Reply: 240
I gave my amusing script to a writer friend for his review. Let’s just say he was... unamused. Yikes. Anyone got some punch lines to spare?
Posted by: ReneC, February 1st, 2019, 10:19am; Reply: 241
I'm also pretty excited to read these. It's going to be a hoot!
I haven't looked at mine since finishing it. I showed it to my filmmaker friend and...well, he doesn't want to shoot it. I think it made him nauseated. But he's dead inside, so maybe I hit the nail on the head. :D
Posted by: FrankM, February 1st, 2019, 10:20am; Reply: 242
I gave my amusing script to a writer friend for his review. Let’s just say he was... unamused. Yikes. Anyone got some punch lines to spare? |
This is part of why my little red boat is securely tied to the dock. I think someone could do a good story with the concept. I am convinced that someone is not me.
Posted by: Matthew Taylor, February 1st, 2019, 10:43am; Reply: 243
I gave my amusing script to a writer friend for his review. Let’s just say he was... unamused. Yikes. Anyone got some punch lines to spare? |
What does a nosy pepper do? Get jalapeno business
Posted by: Zack, February 1st, 2019, 11:01am; Reply: 244
What does a nosy pepper do? Get jalapeno business
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That gave me a migraine. :o
Zack
Posted by: ReneC, February 1st, 2019, 11:18am; Reply: 245
What does a nosy pepper do? Get jalapeno business
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I hope your script is full of dad jokes.
Posted by: eldave1, February 1st, 2019, 11:20am; Reply: 246
I gave my amusing script to a writer friend for his review. Let’s just say he was... unamused. Yikes. Anyone got some punch lines to spare? |
HIM
I gave you everything you ever wanted!
HER
That wasn't what I wanted.
U2
Posted by: eldave1, February 1st, 2019, 11:22am; Reply: 247
Quoted from Dreamscale So...just let my girlfriend read what I had so far, and after 2 pages, she was obviously upset and tried to walk away. After my best romantic niceness, I begged her to just finish, which she did. I didn't have any roses or chocolate to giver her...
She's been really pissed ever since and said there's not 1 single funny anything in the script.
Well...I beg to differ. This could be a rough OWC, and I am prepared for it.
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Your girlfriend's pissed?
What - lot of orphans?????
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 11:40am; Reply: 248
Your girlfriend's pissed?
What - lot of orphans?????
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She was furious, actually. I don't get why, but I don't get chicks, either.
It could be that too many characters kept saying, "You get me?" over and over. I don't know.
I still have a scene to write and I'm scared to read what I have, as maybe the Jager made me think it was funny...cuz she sure didn't find it amusing.
Posted by: Mr. Blonde, February 1st, 2019, 12:34pm; Reply: 249
And for all of you who are bailing, realize that you're just getting Jeff a bigger chance to win!!! ;D;D;D;D;D |
And nooooobody wants that... =)
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 12:42pm; Reply: 250
No one need fear...
THERE IS NO POSSIBLE WAY I COULD "WIN", but let's remember this isn't a competition, and there are no losers. All who enter and take part in providing feedback are winners!
Posted by: Mr. Blonde, February 1st, 2019, 12:47pm; Reply: 251
Quoted from Dreamscale No one need fear...
THERE IS NO POSSIBLE WAY I COULD "WIN", but let's remember this isn't a competition, and there are no losers. All who enter and take part in providing feedback are winners! |
Okay, who are you and what did you do with Jeff? Lol. =)
Posted by: Gary in Houston, February 1st, 2019, 2:16pm; Reply: 252
Quoted from Dreamscale No one need fear...
THERE IS NO POSSIBLE WAY I COULD "WIN", but let's remember this isn't a competition, and there are no losers. All who enter and take part in providing feedback are winners! |
Okay, first review here. Let’s see what we got. No title page. That’s a bad start. No FADE IN. An incomplete sentence right off the bat, and ending that with an ellipsis? This needs to get better quickly if I’m gonna read on.
What’s with the ALL CAPS starting the next line. Horrible grammar at work here, there’s no plot, and fewer characters.
Hate to say it bro, but I’m out.
Posted by: eldave1, February 1st, 2019, 2:28pm; Reply: 253
Okay, first review here. Let’s see what we got. No title page. That’s a bad start. No FADE IN. An incomplete sentence right off the bat, and ending that with an ellipsis? This needs to get better quickly if I’m gonna read on.
What’s with the ALL CAPS starting the next line. Horrible grammar at work here, there’s no plot, and fewer characters.
Hate to say it bro, but I’m out.
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My favorite Jeff review of one of my OWCs:
The good news...Peeps seem to enjoy this for some reason.
The not so good news...
The bad news...
I'm out after the first passage. I cannot stand this smarmy style.
Obviously a pisser, with zero effort to meet the actual challenge.
I will not waste anymore time on this garbage.
Grade...
D-
I am hoping to move up to a D+ :)
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 2:52pm; Reply: 254
Sorry, Dave.
You may give mine a similar review this time around...in fact, most probably will.
Posted by: eldave1, February 1st, 2019, 3:15pm; Reply: 255
Quoted from Dreamscale Sorry, Dave.
You may give mine a similar review this time around...in fact, most probably will. |
All cool mate- it actually gave me a chuckle
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 3:44pm; Reply: 256
My favorite Jeff review of one of my OWCs: The good news...
Peeps seem to enjoy this for some reason.
The not so good news...
The bad news...
I'm out after the first passage. I cannot stand this smarmy style.
Obviously a pisser, with zero effort to meet the actual challenge.
I will not waste anymore time on this garbage.
Grade...
D-
I am hoping to move up to a D+ :)
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Dave, which OWC was this on?
Posted by: FrankM, February 1st, 2019, 3:46pm; Reply: 257
Quoted from Dreamscale Dave, which OWC was this on?
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Seems like it could have been copy-and-pasted onto just about any of them :)
Posted by: eldave1, February 1st, 2019, 3:48pm; Reply: 258
Quoted from Dreamscale
Dave, which OWC was this on?
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Way back in October 2015
Posted by: IamGlenn, February 1st, 2019, 4:12pm; Reply: 259
Just submitted mine.
It's definitely not funny, and now I'm feeling it's not too romantic either.
This'll be fun.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 4:23pm; Reply: 260
Ok, I'm done. Barely got to 5 pages, which is never a good sign.
I think I'll wait for the girlfriend to get home to give it a final read...or maybe that's a terrible idea?
Posted by: eldave1, February 1st, 2019, 4:27pm; Reply: 261
Quoted from Dreamscale Ok, I'm done. Barely got to 5 pages, which is never a good sign.
I think I'll wait for the girlfriend to get home to give it a final read...or maybe that's a terrible idea? |
Based on her reaction last night, I wouldn't let her see it:)
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 4:41pm; Reply: 262
Based on her reaction last night, I wouldn't let her see it:)
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I think that's a good idea!
Posted by: khamanna, February 1st, 2019, 5:22pm; Reply: 263
Okay done and sent.
A lot of cheese went your way and the little dignity that I had left after all those OWC went with it. But I figure if you make me suffer why don't I return the favor.
Posted by: eldave1, February 1st, 2019, 5:29pm; Reply: 264
Okay done and sent.
A lot of cheese went your way and the little dignity that I had left after all those OWC went with it. But I figure if you make me suffer why don't I return the favor.
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Live it.
Posted by: khamanna, February 1st, 2019, 5:40pm; Reply: 265
Hey, I started reading this thread and a lot of people bailing out.
That's just not fair. I started with no idea, I still think there's no idea behind it. But I sat down and wrote an idealess script. I didn't die. I'm also sure no one will die after reading it.
Posted by: FrankM, February 1st, 2019, 5:49pm; Reply: 266
Hey, I started reading this thread and a lot of people bailing out.
That's just not fair. I started with no idea, I still think there's no idea behind it. But I sat down and wrote an idealess script. I didn't die. I'm also sure no one will die after reading it. |
My problem was not a lack of idea or will, it was a lack of time. I also had an unrealistic optimism that I might find time anyway.
Like I said I’ll post the idea because even if I write it without the OWC time constraint it would offend more people than it entertained. But someone else here can probably make it work. There’s no idea so radioactive that NO ONE can make it work.
Posted by: Zack, February 1st, 2019, 5:57pm; Reply: 267
Submitted. I'm very sorry, people. Please don't think any less of me. ;D
Zack
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 6:12pm; Reply: 268
Submitted.
I can already see the negative reviews pouring in...
Posted by: eldave1, February 1st, 2019, 6:35pm; Reply: 269
Quoted from Dreamscale Submitted.
I can already see the negative reviews pouring in... |
We should all practice kindness on this one
Posted by: Warren, February 1st, 2019, 6:46pm; Reply: 270
We should all practice kindness on this one
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Unless you can clearly figure out which one is Jeff's script, then go to town. :P
Posted by: eldave1, February 1st, 2019, 6:52pm; Reply: 271
Unless you can clearly figure out which one is Jeff's script, then go to town. :P
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Lol
Posted by: Gary in Houston, February 1st, 2019, 7:03pm; Reply: 272
Submitted.
Be warned, reading mine will be like when they opened the Ark of the Covenant in "Raiders of the Lost Ark." Your face will melt off and nothing will be left of you except a piles of ashes.
Don't say I didn't warn you. HA HA HAHA HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 7:05pm; Reply: 273
Unless you can clearly figure out which one is Jeff's script, then go to town. :P
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;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
Thanks, guys!
You'll never see it coming, as it's littered with orphans and other crazy shit.
Most of you probably weren't here when I entered 3 pissers in a single OWC, and they were written so absolutely terribly, the reviews were often very nurturing and nice. Oh...those were the days...
Posted by: James McClung, February 1st, 2019, 7:31pm; Reply: 274
Not looking good for me. I didn't even start writing until this afternoon (smart, huh?). I'm coming off over a year-long dry spell, so I can't belt the pages out as quickly as I used to, not to mention my original idea has proven too complicated for this challenge as it will definitely exceed the page limit. I've since abandoned the idea and am trying to think up a simpler concept for a 5-pager. No luck so far...
Posted by: Sandra Elstree., February 1st, 2019, 7:31pm; Reply: 275
Hey, I started reading this thread and a lot of people bailing out.
That's just not fair. I started with no idea, I still think there's no idea behind it. But I sat down and wrote an idealess script. I didn't die. I'm also sure no one will die after reading it. |
Khamanna, I really love your optimism. :)
Sandra
Posted by: PKCardinal, February 1st, 2019, 7:51pm; Reply: 276
Okay then. That's submitted.
Never written a romcom before. Still not sure if I have.
Posted by: ReneC, February 1st, 2019, 7:55pm; Reply: 277
Okay then. That's submitted.
Never written a romcom before. Still not sure if I have. |
Ditto! But it's submitted. We'll soon find out.
Posted by: Zack, February 1st, 2019, 7:57pm; Reply: 278
Not looking good for me. I didn't even start writing until this afternoon (smart, huh?). I'm coming off over a year-long dry spell, so I can't belt the pages out as quickly as I used to, not to mention my original idea has proven too complicated for this challenge as it will definitely exceed the page limit. I've since abandoned the idea and am trying to think up a simpler concept for a 5-pager. No luck so far... |
If I can do it, you can do it, Dude. Pump that shit out. Can't be any worse than what I wrote. ;D ;D ;D ;D
Zack
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 7:59pm; Reply: 279
If I can do it, you can do it, Dude. Pump that shit out. Can't be any worse than what I wrote. ;D ;D ;D ;DZack
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Yeah, James! Get something in! Remember the old days? Peeps would seriously start with 4 hours to go...or less, and be schallammied, but would write right up to the deadline and submit.
C'mon, MAN!!!!
Posted by: Mr. Blonde, February 1st, 2019, 8:02pm; Reply: 280
Quoted from Dreamscale Most of you probably weren't here when I entered 3 pissers in a single OWC, and they were written so absolutely terribly, the reviews were often very nurturing and nice. Oh...those were the days... |
"Most". =)
I'm submitting, as well, although with a caveat. I'm entering it as a DQ entry because I couldn't edit it down. The page count was what got me this time around. Still, I wanted to try my hand at a real challenge and this is what I was able to come up with. I'm still planning on reading and reviewing everybody's entry and wish you all the best of luck.
Posted by: Pale Yellow, February 1st, 2019, 8:19pm; Reply: 281
Not gonna make it. Behind on my monthly page quota. Will try to read a few. :)
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 8:34pm; Reply: 282
Not gonna make it. Behind on my monthly page quota. Will try to read a few. :) |
Dena!!! WTF???? Seriously? You can EASILY belt out a 5 pager.
You, me, everyone knows this. JUST DO IT!!!! C'mon, my friend!!!!!
JUST DO IT!!!!! ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
Posted by: irish eyes, February 1st, 2019, 8:46pm; Reply: 283
Wow back on reply 197 I sarcastically pointed out 2 writers who have cried foul on their scripts.
Since then at least another 7 writers have complained about how bad their scripts are...My bud Jeff giving it the full Whine ;D;D
I feel like we need to bring a shrink in here for intervention..
Usually a peep or 2 complains before we start reviewing but this is probably the worst I've seen in 10 years ;D;D;D
Posted by: Hank (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 8:48pm; Reply: 284
When can we expect the scripts to be posted on February 2nd?
Posted by: Pale Yellow, February 1st, 2019, 8:49pm; Reply: 285
Quoted from Dreamscale
Dena!!! WTF???? Seriously? You can EASILY belt out a 5 pager.
You, me, everyone knows this. JUST DO IT!!!! C'mon, my friend!!!!!
JUST DO IT!!!!! ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
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UGH seriously? With only 3 hours left! It'll be total SHEET! And you know it!
Posted by: LC, February 1st, 2019, 9:22pm; Reply: 286
Quoted from Hank When can we expect the scripts to be posted on February 2nd? |
Hank, it all depends on Don and the element of surprise. Just have to keep your eyes peeled!
Posted by: Don, February 1st, 2019, 9:35pm; Reply: 287
UGH seriously? With only 3 hours left! It'll be total SHEET! And you know it!
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WWH*D?
*Hemingway
Posted by: Hank (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 9:37pm; Reply: 288
I will be refreshing the recent posts page all night in hopes of the OWCs being posted. I'm excited to begin reading everyone's submission(s).
Posted by: FrankM, February 1st, 2019, 9:46pm; Reply: 289
Quoted from Hank When can we expect the scripts to be posted on February 2nd? |
I would expect them to be posted on February 2
over and over again until everyone writes the most constructive reviews they possibly could. Only then will the cycle end.
Posted by: Hank (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 9:57pm; Reply: 290
lol :) That might end up being an endless cycle :)
Posted by: Hank (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 10:13pm; Reply: 291
Seriously though, I do appreciate all the feedback I've received so far, and think all the feedback I've seen given to others is valid. It's the rudeness that sometimes goes along with it that I don't like.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 10:33pm; Reply: 292
Quoted from Hank Seriously though, I do appreciate all the feedback I've received so far, and think all the feedback I've seen given to others is valid. It's the rudeness that sometimes goes along with it that I don't like. |
Brace yourself, my brother...OWC's can be very...RUDE!!!!
Good news is, it seems Dustbin is away, and Baltis has been gone for years.
Watch out for that Libby chick, though...she can be very harsh! ;D ;D ;D ;D
Posted by: Hank (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 10:56pm; Reply: 293
I'll put on my thick (fake) leather onesie before the reviewing begins, and try to keep it on :)
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 10:58pm; Reply: 294
Quoted from Hank I'll put on my thick (fake) leather onesie before the reviewing begins, and try to keep it on :) |
I usually put 1 wig on my head and another one on my gut, and of course the T-Shirt I'll wear will have holes around the belly area, so some of the curly hair wig can be seen.
OH SHIT!!! I just gave away my OWC entry with that!! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!
Posted by: Hank (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 11:00pm; Reply: 295
Posted by: James McClung, February 1st, 2019, 11:02pm; Reply: 296
I'm definitely out. I got nothing. Pathetic. I feel genuinely defeated by this challenge as I did sincerely try until the very end. Congrats to everyone who made it in.
Posted by: Hank (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 11:07pm; Reply: 297
There's always next month, James :)
Posted by: Pale Yellow, February 1st, 2019, 11:14pm; Reply: 298
OMG two hours CR-A-PP'D out. Sorry fellow writers... it's Jeff and Don's fault! :) I'm in!
Posted by: Sandra Elstree., February 1st, 2019, 11:15pm; Reply: 299
I'm definitely out. I got nothing. Pathetic. I feel genuinely defeated by this challenge as I did sincerely try until the very end. Congrats to everyone who made it in. |
I felt the same way with the October 7WC. I did write, though. But I couldn't pull anything together that would have been acceptable to submit...
Still, these challenges are so important. I don't know if people really understand how important they are.
They challenge us to write. And that's what it's all about.
After all, we cannot edit a blank page.
Congratulations to everyone whether you've thrown your work in or not. It's a tough go.
Sandra
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), February 1st, 2019, 11:26pm; Reply: 300
I LOVE DENA!!!!! ;D ;D ;D ;D
Now, watch her win! She's a crafty gal...
Posted by: eldave1, February 1st, 2019, 11:31pm; Reply: 301
I felt the same way with the October 7WC. I did write, though. But I couldn't pull anything together that would have been acceptable to submit...
Still, these challenges are so important. I don't know if people really understand how important they are.
They challenge us to write. And that's what it's all about.
After all, we cannot edit a blank page.
Congratulations to everyone whether you've thrown your work in or not. It's a tough go.
Sandra
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Jeff could edit a blank page.
Spacing off
Blanks not centered
Underwritten
Out
Posted by: eldave1, February 1st, 2019, 11:32pm; Reply: 302
Posted by: SAC, February 1st, 2019, 11:56pm; Reply: 303
Good luck all. Missed the last couple but I think I got my wheels back. We’ll see. Some seriously good writers involved with this one.
Posted by: SAC, February 2nd, 2019, 12:05am; Reply: 304
Whoa!! This turnout looks legit!!
Posted by: LC, February 2nd, 2019, 12:16am; Reply: 305
Whew! After ditching four stories started over the week I spent a few hours and got one in just under the wire!
There won't be blood... but there will be mistakes.
I won't even attempt to say: go easy, cause OWC critics never do.
Really looking forward to reading all yours. :)
Posted by: LC, February 2nd, 2019, 12:42am; Reply: 306
Quoted from Dreamscale ...Watch out for that Libby chick, though...she can be very harsh! ;D ;D ;D ;D |
Haha. Yep, a real hard arse, me. ;D Watch it, you!
Posted by: khamanna, February 2nd, 2019, 1:26am; Reply: 307
haha, I'm so happy to see lots of girls are in tgis time.
Looking forward for harsh reviews - these are actually nice distraction from the everyday life
Posted by: khamanna, February 2nd, 2019, 1:52am; Reply: 308
Whoa!! This turnout looks legit!! |
Woah. people wrote two or three or something I'd think.
What do we do now...
Posted by: Warren, February 11th, 2019, 11:03pm; Reply: 309
Quoted from Hank 40 short scripts should take around 6 and a 1/2 hours to read, plus the time it takes to review each one. We are given close to 2 weeks to read and review. I think it will be easy for me to do. |
Still got a fair few to go, do you think you're going to get there?
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), February 11th, 2019, 11:49pm; Reply: 310
Still got a fair few to go, do you think you're going to get there? |
HA!! ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
My thoughts exactly!
Classic...
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