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Posted by: Don, February 17th, 2004, 10:31am
When the World Ends by Matt C - Short, Thriller - St. Michael's State Hospital is pourly understaffed and underfunded. Then one day something really weird happens, a man shows up with a tarantuala living inside his stomach. This is the first script I ever wrote and I wrote it back in 2000. If it's a little shabby or there are facts wrong email me and let me know because I hate doing any research - html** format.
Posted by: Old Time Wesley, February 17th, 2004, 11:25pm; Reply: 1
First things first, that huge dialogue bit has to go. I mean security guards don't talk that much let alone a character that appears in 1 scene

Nobody really has a description in here

Dr Connors turns back from what he does doing.

What's up with the above line?

It is a good idea though, it just seems to me incomplete; almost like it could've and wanted to be a full length feature
Posted by: Old Time Wesley, February 17th, 2004, 11:26pm; Reply: 2
And how does this signify the end of the world, maybe the end of humanity but not the world
Posted by: chism, February 18th, 2004, 3:06am; Reply: 3
This script was intended to be much longer than it was and there were three parts planned, but it gave off too much of a terminator or matrix vibe so i cut it. When the world ends is called that because that was my favourite song when I finished the shorter version you read. Originally it was going to be called st michaels but i though that was pretty gay.
Posted by: Old Time Wesley, February 18th, 2004, 6:18pm; Reply: 4
They were spiders right? How about Humanity Bites  ??)
Posted by: Heretic, February 22nd, 2004, 2:50am; Reply: 5
Well, the security dude's mad long speech was kinda odd, given his absolute disappearance after.  I think it needs a bit more buildup.  But I liked the idea.

-Chris
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