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Posted by: Don, March 22nd, 2004, 10:35pm
I like Haiku poems
five then seven syllables
and five to end it.
Posted by: Don, March 22nd, 2004, 10:37pm; Reply: 1
Five syllables here
Seven syllables mid way
Five syllables end
Posted by: SonofElrond (Guest), March 22nd, 2004, 10:38pm; Reply: 2
I am not familiar with this? What exactly is Haiku?
Posted by: Don, March 22nd, 2004, 10:40pm; Reply: 3
Fat kid runs, roars loud
Skinny kid jumps, flits about
Nine o'clock calm comes.
Posted by: Don, March 22nd, 2004, 10:41pm; Reply: 4

Quoted from SonofElrond, posted March 22nd, 2004, 10:38pm at here
I am not fimiliar with this? What exactly is Haiku?


Five syllables here
Seven syllables mid way
Five syllables end
Posted by: Don, March 22nd, 2004, 10:44pm; Reply: 5
Haiku is one of the most important form of traditional Japanese poetry. Haiku is, today, a 17-syllable verse form consisting of three metrical units of 5, 7, and 5 syllables.  Since early days...
Posted by: SonofElrond (Guest), March 22nd, 2004, 10:47pm; Reply: 6
That is really interesting. Do you have any examples we can read?
Posted by: lesleyjl21, March 22nd, 2004, 10:57pm; Reply: 7
here are mine:

finding it easy
just to go with what is there
wandering my mind

will try to release
this crazy pattern of words
I am truly drained
Posted by: Don, March 22nd, 2004, 11:10pm; Reply: 8
Lesley,

Ah. A Haiku about Haiku.

Don

Posted by: Don, March 22nd, 2004, 11:12pm; Reply: 9
Unrelated:

Take a chance on me
Do you want to dance with me
Joni Mitchell, Blue


Song of the Candle
It should have inspired me
Sad Stan Rogers gone.
Posted by: TheParadoxicalShaman, March 22nd, 2004, 11:32pm; Reply: 10
haiku sounds funny
who made up this silly thing
well i'm off for now


Posted by: Don, March 22nd, 2004, 11:48pm; Reply: 11
Praxadodgicalsahnam:

Bravo!  Bravo!

Nod.
Posted by: R.E._Freak (Guest), March 23rd, 2004, 11:59am; Reply: 12
My teacher said I was good at making weird haikus.

Haikus are funny
I enjoy making no sense
Laugh and prance and dance
Posted by: TheParadoxicalShaman, March 24th, 2004, 12:21am; Reply: 13
haah
very uplifting


how bout......

haiku haiku hai
ku haiku haiku haiku
haiku haiku hai
Posted by: R.E._Freak (Guest), March 24th, 2004, 12:03pm; Reply: 14
Pure poetry in motion!
Posted by: lesleyjl21, March 24th, 2004, 1:47pm; Reply: 15
That's hysterical, shaman.  That's really really funny. ;D
Posted by: R.E._Freak (Guest), March 24th, 2004, 1:55pm; Reply: 16
Isn't there another type too, that's five, seven, seven, five or something like that?
Posted by: SonofElrond (Guest), March 24th, 2004, 7:50pm; Reply: 17
where the hell everything go.
Posted by: TheParadoxicalShaman, March 25th, 2004, 10:09pm; Reply: 18
haahh

hows that for talent, all?

lol
Posted by: akkira, May 28th, 2004, 5:29am; Reply: 19
                     i am here just one
             i stand alone in this dark place
                  i found the light, hope
Posted by: akkira, May 28th, 2004, 5:32am; Reply: 20
    let us find our peace
from that sad september day
 good bye from this earth
Posted by: akkira, May 28th, 2004, 5:34am; Reply: 21
 i would like a topic
because i am runnig out
 no ideas left here
Posted by: AndreaJones, July 13th, 2004, 12:02pm; Reply: 22
My dog always barks
And he chews on my nice shoes
But I love him still.
Posted by: Rob S., July 13th, 2004, 9:21pm; Reply: 23
Rewind to the past
A chance to make corrections
And live life again.
Posted by: Rob S., July 13th, 2004, 9:23pm; Reply: 24
Cars are cool to drive
And money makes me secure
But love gives me joy.
Posted by: Rob S., July 13th, 2004, 9:25pm; Reply: 25
Singing and Dancing
When you can't do either one
Makes me laugh at you.
Posted by: AndreaJones, July 14th, 2004, 9:44am; Reply: 26
Rob, you'll love this one.

An order of fries,
With a double cheeseburger,
And a soda, please.

Fries and a soda,
Plus, your double cheeseburger.
You owe me four bucks.
Posted by: Rob S., July 14th, 2004, 12:40pm; Reply: 27
*Applause*

I do love it.  That's great.  Very creative.
Posted by: AndreaJones, July 16th, 2004, 5:21pm; Reply: 28
Two dancing chickens
In a large, non-stick stew pot.
It's time for dinner.

-Rob S.
Posted by: Rob S., August 20th, 2004, 10:35am; Reply: 29
Drinking lots of beer
Passing out in the backyard
Impresses no one.
Posted by: Paula-Hanes (Guest), August 20th, 2004, 11:56am; Reply: 30
Read script right here.
The same old thing once again.
Zombie, Horror, Dull.
Posted by: Rob S., August 23rd, 2004, 2:21pm; Reply: 31
Classes have begun,
Time to listen to lectures
That are long and dull.

Don't fall asleep now.
You must listen and write fast
So you can pass tests.
Posted by: R.E._Freak (Guest), August 23rd, 2004, 2:23pm; Reply: 32
Saw the big city
Wish that I could go back there
How I loath this place.
Posted by: lesleyjl21, August 23rd, 2004, 5:18pm; Reply: 33
Maybe not the place
Definitely not the time
I feel sexual

*grin* ;D
Posted by: Rob S., August 23rd, 2004, 5:36pm; Reply: 34
R.E. Freak, Lesley, great.  Would write another one, but my brain is fried.
Posted by: TheParadoxicalShaman, August 23rd, 2004, 5:40pm; Reply: 35
This might sound quite strange
But the aliens know me well
I have a spaceship
Posted by: R.E._Freak (Guest), August 23rd, 2004, 5:48pm; Reply: 36
On a lighter note:

Chickens amuse me
I wonder if they can fly?
Apparently not.

And another:

Darkness everywhere
I run but can't escape it
Another Starbucks
Posted by: Rob S., August 26th, 2004, 2:49pm; Reply: 37
Watching basketball
Is fun and quite exciting
When players can shoot.
Posted by: lesleyjl21, August 26th, 2004, 2:56pm; Reply: 38
About our U.S. olympic "dream team"!  (holds head down, cringes...) That's great, Rob.
Posted by: AndreaJones, August 27th, 2004, 7:56am; Reply: 39
The duck and a man,
He catches it and cooks it,
It is dinner time.

Dreams may not come true,
But the vigilant pursuit
Of them makes life real.
Posted by: Rob S., September 2nd, 2004, 8:21pm; Reply: 40
Children run and play
Causing chaos everywhere.
They are the future.

Fear is a feeling
That can be overwhelming,
But I will prevail.

A boring essay
That I must write for English
To get a good grade.
Posted by: Rob S., November 5th, 2004, 4:56pm; Reply: 41
Bored out of my mind
Got nothing to do ever
So I run and play.

Grab a credit card,
Head to an expensive store
And spend like crazy.

Reality shows
On people's televisions
Forcing them to read.
Posted by: Rob S., May 26th, 2005, 8:11pm; Reply: 42
Here's some more.

What is it you ask,
That I hold in my two hands?
It's a small puppy.

Steroids and baseball,
Congress is having a fit,
And the Lakers suck.

Driving an old car
May not make you cool like me
But you save money.

People like pizza.
Thin crust is my preference.
Must be delivered.
Posted by: RyanSmith, May 29th, 2005, 6:19pm; Reply: 43
I Don't like haiku's
They seem too short and boring
They really bore me
Posted by: jerdol, August 19th, 2005, 7:27am; Reply: 44
Okay, now I'm mad.

I happen to be a very big fan of Haikus and Senryus.  And the definition of them given here is completely false.

The old Japanese Haiku had 17 Onji, which is not exactly a syllable.  The english word "ran" has to Onji, and the word "rain" has three.  

The modern/Western Haiku has no syllable limit, and can even be two lines long.  It is however a short poem that of a very specific type.

1)  A haiku is about nature.  Not about human nature, but about regular nature.  A frog jumping into a river, or a tree shedding a leaf.

2)  A haiku paints a still picture or a short scene, using senseory perceptions.  Basically, it follows the script-writing rule "show it, don't tell it".  It deals in sight, sound and smell, but not with thought.

A Senryu is similar, but deals in human nature.

An old Haiku of mine:

Brown creature, green leaf
Wings rubbing together
"CRIK-ET, CRIK-ET

Some find Haikus boring, but I don't.  They paint a very clear picture with only a few words, and make you wonder.
Posted by: Rob S., November 30th, 2005, 7:33pm; Reply: 45
Please post some poems,
Short or long, funny or lovely,
I like to read them.
Posted by: Zombie Sean, January 12th, 2006, 10:22pm; Reply: 46
I wish I could write
A better Haiku than this
But I am too dumb


:B
Posted by: I_M, January 13th, 2006, 11:16pm; Reply: 47
Write A Script Right Now
Post It On Simply Scripts Now
Wait Until Sunday
Posted by: Higgonaitor, January 16th, 2006, 10:42am; Reply: 48
I have been trying
To write A haiku for you
Some things I just can't do.

Damnit!
Posted by: R.E._Freak (Guest), January 16th, 2006, 2:35pm; Reply: 49
A dead, droning wail,
Echoing through the wasteland.
The dead have risen.

ZOMBIES!  ;D
Posted by: Zombie Sean, January 16th, 2006, 5:06pm; Reply: 50
Hehe I love zombies.
Posted by: Higgonaitor, January 16th, 2006, 11:20pm; Reply: 51
Maybe were beyond,
ancient asian poetry,
maybe it's just me.
Posted by: Don, January 16th, 2006, 11:23pm; Reply: 52

Quoted from Higgonaitor
I have been trying
To write A haiku for you
Some things I just can't do.

Damnit!


Haiku citation "Some Things I just can't do" - six syllables


Posted by: Don, January 16th, 2006, 11:28pm; Reply: 53

Quoted from R.E._Freak
A dead, droning wail,
Echoing through the wasteland.
The dead have risen.

ZOMBIES!  ;D


Haiku citation - Excessive lines.  Suggest,

"A dead, droning wail,
Echoing through the wasteland.
The dead rise - Zombies!"
Posted by: Shelton, January 16th, 2006, 11:39pm; Reply: 54
Andy's Tanuki
Oh my how it flaps about
Tanuki indeed
Posted by: Heretic, January 16th, 2006, 11:51pm; Reply: 55
Andy's Tanuki
Everybody loves it so
Why?  They're just big balls

Swaying as he jumps
I find myself mesmerized
Now I feel the love

Until time does end
I will watch those testes dance
...unfortunately.
Posted by: Higgonaitor, January 16th, 2006, 11:57pm; Reply: 56

Quoted from Don


Haiku citation "Some Things I just can't do" - six syllables




get it?  its about how I can't do it, the mess up is there intentionally
Posted by: R.E._Freak (Guest), January 17th, 2006, 1:16am; Reply: 57
Don? He is the man.
Here on Simply Scripts, he's boss.
Dance for Don, mortals!
Posted by: theprodigalson, January 17th, 2006, 2:44am; Reply: 58
Monkey's are really cool
they will kill us in our sleep
bow to the monkey overlords


;D
Posted by: Don, January 17th, 2006, 10:32pm; Reply: 59

Quoted from Higgonaitor


get it?  its about how I can't do it, the mess up is there intentionally


Yes, I got it.  I wanted to make sure everyone else got it.  I thought it was funny and I was trying to think up a subtle way to bring it to everyone's attention.  I thought it was funny as heck.

Don
Posted by: Don, January 17th, 2006, 10:37pm; Reply: 60

Quoted from R.E._Freak

Don? He is the man.
Here on Simply Scripts, he's boss.
Dance for Don, mortals!


ROTFLMFAO.  I thought that was so funny.  

Don - Haiku Nazi

Posted by: Andy Petrou, January 18th, 2006, 9:25am; Reply: 61

Quoted from Heretic
Andy's Tanuki
Everybody loves it so
Why?  They're just big balls

Swaying as he jumps
I find myself mesmerized
Now I feel the love

Until time does end
I will watch those testes dance
...unfortunately.


ROTFLMAO!!!!!!!!!!!! Heretic, this is tooooooooooooo funny.


Quoted from Shelton
Andy's Tanuki
Oh my how it flaps about
Tanuki indeed


Mike, this sounds... so... wrong... oh my.

Will I ever be able to diassociate from this creature swinging away beneath me?

Andy xxx

PS - Don, I agree. Well done Freak!!

Posted by: bert, January 18th, 2006, 9:34am; Reply: 62
The bold Tanuki
Orbs of delight swinging free
Wiggle, wiggle, wow.
Posted by: Andy Petrou, January 18th, 2006, 9:40am; Reply: 63
Good one Bert!!  ;D

Here's my first ever Haiku -

Tanuki loves nuts
Swinging low and pendulous
Beware little girls.




Hope that's right!
Andy xxx
Posted by: Zombie Sean, January 18th, 2006, 6:09pm; Reply: 64
Here we go again
Second try at a Haiku
Did I do it right?
Posted by: Higgonaitor, January 18th, 2006, 6:31pm; Reply: 65
the dead walk tonight,
you followed the directions
although it was bland
Posted by: cyanidejunkie (Guest), January 18th, 2006, 8:40pm; Reply: 66
They were tacos. Just...
Tacos. Yea, tho I wish that
I had a taco.

--------

Note: "Yea" is not "yeah." It rhymes with "yay."
Posted by: R.E._Freak (Guest), January 18th, 2006, 8:44pm; Reply: 67
Wiggle, wiggle, wow!
Tanuki's swinging greatness!
Wiggle, wiggle, WOW!
Posted by: Zombie Sean, January 18th, 2006, 10:38pm; Reply: 68
That signature goes
On forever and it is
Still funny today
Posted by: Higgonaitor, January 18th, 2006, 10:55pm; Reply: 69
on the other hand,
it might be getting older,
than the ground we tread.
Posted by: Zombie Sean, January 20th, 2006, 8:15pm; Reply: 70
Okay okay here is my official Haiku that I also had to do for English class:

It looks like water
With white puffs like cotton balls
The sky brightens the earth

The green makes them shine
As the sun's light shines on them
Trees have made us live

It splashes on shores
And quenches our thirsty mouths
Water's refreshing

We were suppose to have three "stanzas", if that is what you still call them in Haikus, about one thing and I chose nature (or more like the sky, trees, and water). I hope you like it!

Sean
Posted by: George Willson, January 20th, 2006, 9:23pm; Reply: 71
Just read this odd thread
Not sure I understand it
I'll go back to sleep.
Posted by: Higgonaitor, January 21st, 2006, 12:34am; Reply: 72
you will sleep soundly,
for the Tanuki jiggles,
mesmerizingly

(spelling?)
Posted by: R.E._Freak (Guest), January 21st, 2006, 12:56am; Reply: 73
So many haikus,
That are about Tanuki.
Big huge testicles.
Posted by: George Willson, January 21st, 2006, 4:26pm; Reply: 74
These Tanuki gems
With the wiggles and the wows
Are quite disturbing

Come now let's be real
I'm not one to stare at balls
Though they hypnotize

Where's that bless-ed thing
I want it more than testes
Jiggling boobies

There's where I would say
Without a qualm or quiver
Wiggle, wiggle, wow!
Posted by: Higgonaitor, January 22nd, 2006, 10:02am; Reply: 75
kevan

it should only be,
maximum and minimum,
three lines that is it.

five syllables here,
seven come in the next,
the last line is five.

try again buddie,
I think that you will do great,
it's not very hard
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