Sunset Boulevard (2003) by Michael James - Drama - When Emma moves to Hollywood to become a star she soon learns only one question matters... 'how far will you go?'  A drama about pursuing dreams and the price to be paid. - pdf format.

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Thanks Don for posting 'sunset boulevard'....

This screenplay is the first piece of screenwriting I ever did.  I literally sat down with no idea how to write a screenplay, armed only with a borrowed copy of final daft 5.0.   Three months later I had my very first draft complete.  I was hooked.  After spending another month polishing it, I finally shelved it to move on to other projects. 

Forward 2 years...I'm  converting my script files to a new software program when I run across this original draft.  I sat down just to give it a quick read for laughs... 2 months later I had a completely re-worked story.  The new version retains some of the originals elements but has a much darker storyline...enjoy. 

P.s.  before the posting starts, yes, the main character's name should read "Faith" not "Emma"...

After 35 pages I wanted to stop for a moment and give some thoughts:
--The dialogue is excellent!
--The opening is very well done!
--I like the ‘Flash Back.’ HOWEVER, I would make it more than 6 months. Give us a little space. I would say 2 years. Unless I missed something… Is 6 mo. pertinent to the story/plot?
--When Faith and  Natasha are driving to ‘some destination,’ and Faith states that Natasha is her “best friend,” how can that be? They just met. Right?  Should be “me,” instead of “your best friend” wash away into poverty...

--At this point, I presume Natasha has introduced Faith to prostitution. Right? I think this is a BIG step for Faith. Yet you just  CUT that whole experience out. And Natasha never informs Faith that this is what she will be doing for the night. And does Natasha have a PIMP?  I got the feeling this all happened tooo quick.

--The attitude so far is: A girls gotta do whatta girls gotta do. And Prostitution is “just a job.” I just don’t think most people, actually, very few, would take that kind of attitude toward such job.  I mean, it is illegal.

Here is my suggestion: Damien, that BAD GUY PIMP, sees Faith with Natasha. He likes what he sees. Damien then goes to work behind the scene to get Faith to work for him i.e. He gets her fired. He loans her money, etc. Then… after a few days, he tells her to PAY UP!

Personally, I would like to see Faith ‘forced’ into this line of work…not go sooo voluntarily.

Just my opinion. Good Luck

Mombo...

Thank you for the comments!  They are much appreciated.  Instead of answering your questions about what the girls are doing, I ask that you keep reading as all should come clear.  I look forward to hearing your opinion of the entire script, and thanks again for taking the time to read it.

Mike