Citizen Erased by Konish Dutta - Thriller, Adventure, Drama, Horror - A man witnesses a racial crime, yet does nothing to stop the murder. Haunted by this incident, his conscience slowly deteriorates, eventually forcing him to leave his original life and embark on an odyssey that will answer questions he's always been too afraid to ask. - doc, format 8)

Hey what's up guys? This is my first screenplay so please tell me what you think. I know there are a few grammatical problems but I'm still editing. This is my rough. Thanks for the future replies

A rule on screenwriting is you should NEVER let anyone read your rough draft, not even your mother.  Wait until you have a second draft completed and get feedback on that draft, then you can get a third draft.  Any book on screenwriting will say the same.

okay whatever. i don't read books on screenwriting. i just watch movies and look at what works. could anyone read this and criticize please?