Anticipating Love by Natalie Zhivolup - Comedy - Duncan meets Lisa at the carnival of Venice. Unfortunately, she loses his phone number and from this time on his life turns into a constant attempt to find the girl. They both lead ordinary life - working, having fun with their friends and dating - without knowing that their soulmate lives right across the street. 106 pages - pdf, format 8)

Good work! To me you represented each character quite well. I would certainly love to turn "anticipating love" into a stage play.

This was alright I guess.  The story was pretty decent on the whole, even though it was a hodgepodge of Serendipity/Under The Tuscan Sun/Cinderella.

I would suggest going back and cutting out some of the wordy descriptions and overinflated dialogue.