Death Lives! by Tony (fartistic) - Comedy, Dark Comedy - Three friends. The first think's he's The Grim Reaper, the second think's he's a crime fighter (that's boardering on copyright infringement), and the other thinks he's Roy Orbison. - pdf, format 8)

I'm the author of this script. So be careful what you say here. I might get hurt.

You, sir, have a fan-flipping-tastic script here.

I mean, it's so damn funny.  I bursted out laughing at some of the situations.  Namely when Death feels harrassed by his neighbors about the thefts but it turns out he actually is stealing stuff from them.  Also the conversation between Bat Man and the Printer was short but sweet.  This script appears to be mainly focused on dialogue and you NAILED it.  The concept is also great.  A bunch of losers dressing up like various icons living their lives; turbulent ones even if they are a bit dysfunctional and aimless.

Also it did very much remind me of Seinfeld and the reference, if I am not mistaken, is an homage of sorts to the comedic style that it followed.  I actually couldn't stop reading it after the first page.  Just brilliant.

Thank you for taking the time to give it a read.  Your kind words are very much appreciated. Glad you enjoyed it.

As for the Seinfeld thing, not really an intentional homage. Halfway through writing this script It dawned on me that what I was writing was quite simular to the Seinfeld style (just a hell of a lot more twisted). That actually pissed me off. Not that there's anything wrong with that. Seinfeld is a great show. What really bothered me was the fact that when I set out to write this script my main objective was to be unique as possible.  

The reference to Seinfeld in the dialogue you speak of was intentionally placed there. Sort of me admitting it before anyone else could point it out for me.

Tony,

This seems like a pretty good concept, but you've gotta go back and do some heavy proofing and reformatting on this.

You've got all these characters showing up out of the blue that immediately start talking, and they haven't been introduced, and Dave and the Radio Personality talking on the radio should be a (V.O.).

Quoted from Shelton Tony, This seems like a pretty good concept, but you've gotta go back and do some heavy proofing and reformatting on this. You've got all these characters showing up out of the blue that immediately start talking, and they haven't been introduced, and Dave and the Radio Personality talking on the radio should be a (V.O.).

I definetly agree with you. I'm still going through the learning process. This was my first script so I was kinda learning as I was going along. The version of the script on this site is a very rough draft. I submitted it awhile ago and since then I have gone through the script making many corrections.

I know I definetly have to shorten it up too. 131 pages is too lengthy.

Thanks for pointing out the radio conversation. I kinda had the feeling there was something wrong there. I wasn't exactly sure how to work something like that into a script. I knew what a voice-over was, I just wasn't sure if background noise from a television or a radio could be considered a voice-over.