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Posted by: Don, January 28th, 2006, 11:38am
Fade to Black by Alan Olivas - Horror - The movie centers around a reality show named "Fade To Black".  In the show, seven contestants are put on investiagtion assignments of the paranormal.  With the winner or winners getting ten million dollars.  The last show of the season, they are sent to investigate a church which is said to be haunted by the ghost of Sister Theresea.  A nun who commited suicide over her undying love for Father Patrick, who, was a child molester.  Now some twenty-three years later, the contestants are forced to spend an entire night in the church. - doc, format 8)
Posted by: ChipPollo, January 29th, 2006, 4:31am; Reply: 1
I enjoyed reading this. My favorite character was definetly James, I can relate to him. Call me crazy but all through the script I had this feeling him and Allen had a thing for each other? Kinda like Ben Affleck and whats his names character in chasing Amy. Am I just imagining this?
Posted by: Lon, January 29th, 2006, 11:10pm; Reply: 2
I can't comment on your story because I was turned off almost immediately by the tremendous amount of misspells -- at least five within the first three minutes of reading, which is where I stopped.

It may sound nit-picky, but that kind of thing will get your script tossed aside faster than you can say "spell check."  

Your descriptions seem to include tidbits which are inconsequential.  Does a female character being a registered nurse have anything to do with the story?  If not, drop it.  If it does, don't TELL us she's a registered nurse.  SHOW us she's a registered nurse.  Same for many other character descriptions ("he's a real estate agent," etc.).

I can't speak for other readers here, but I lose interest quickly when format and spelling errors stand out more than what's actually being told or said.  Some here and there are okay if it's just a draft you'd not planned on submitting -- but when they're more prevalent than any script or character aspect, I tend to just not bother.
Posted by: robb_blaze014, February 5th, 2006, 3:34pm; Reply: 3
good script It needs to be made into a movie!!!!!!!
Posted by: the goose, February 6th, 2006, 2:33am; Reply: 4
ok I'm now starting to read this and already the first five pages have annoyed me. Like hell would three or four big-time businessmen (the TV executives I mean) use that many expletives, It's ridclious.
Posted by: tron11, February 6th, 2006, 10:09pm; Reply: 5
GUys thanks for the replies.  I am writing a second draft and I'm using what you guys are writing to make it a better script.  So, thanks everyone and I hope the second draft will be better.
Posted by: Don, March 21st, 2018, 3:18pm; Reply: 6
Posted by: Mr. Blonde, March 21st, 2018, 3:29pm; Reply: 7
Wow. Talk about taking the long route to a sale. Congratulations. =)
Posted by: eldave1, March 21st, 2018, 3:34pm; Reply: 8
Much congrats
Posted by: Dustin, March 21st, 2018, 5:29pm; Reply: 9
11 years, wow.
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