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Posted by: Don, February 7th, 2006, 10:43pm
Stormville Chapter I by Helio J Cordeiro - Short, Thriller - It is about how an unthinkable action reflects for years on a person and how a repressed person does lot of insanities. - pdf, format 8)
Posted by: Antemasque, February 8th, 2006, 10:02am; Reply: 1
Well i don't have to bash you on your format because you did good on it.  ;D

Okay this script was strange but hey that's you. I did enjoy it and it was entertaining. But it does seem rushed but it's not a big deal because this script is... well it's Stormville.


How many chapters you plan on writing?


Andrew
Posted by: Helio, February 8th, 2006, 11:48am; Reply: 2
Yeah, Andrew, it is realy a stormed situation, but I needed to write it anyway, do you know these guys here in SS, don't you... They do'nt forgive mistakes...I have to redeem myself for the first Stormville, you know, otherwise I'll go to the hell when I die...Don't say, I know after this one I will!
Posted by: Tster2005, February 8th, 2006, 2:36pm; Reply: 3
I always have a look at your shorts when I'm on Simply Scripts, and I've wondered if you've ever thought of bulking them out a little more.  The reason I say this is your shorts could possibly make episodes of the Twightlight Zone, and with a little more gusto then who knows.

Ditto on the formatting comment from Andrew Romance.

As I read your shorts I can see the picture your painting and feel the mood your setting, and I'd say the dialogue manages to keep the picture and mood there.

Overall I enjoy your work and I'll be looking out for more.

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MY SCREENPLAYS:

"The Dream Defenders"
Posted by: Helio, February 8th, 2006, 3:50pm; Reply: 4
Hey, Tster2005, thanks alot for your comments.

Sorry, did not read yet your The dream Defenders, but now I have to.
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