Titians of Heaven by Anthony Salako - Action, Fantasy, Historical - In the dark ages of the world, an angel and his three descendants fight to protect the human race from underworld demons bent on obliterating the planet. 125 pages - pdf, format 8)

I'm a few pages into this and can tell that this was either written as a shooting draft or you don't know the rule about camera directions. This one is full of them. You ARE supposed to use them if this is going to be made into a film and your the director, but if you just want people to read it, you need to get rid of them. They just fill up the page and make for a slower read, which isn't what you want.

Just some advice. I'll edit a review of the script into this post later, so keep a look out. ;-)

Landon

Hi there, thanks for the note Landon, I really appreciate your suggestion. But just to say that I understand what you mean by the camera directions. But this is NOT a spec script. I suppose I should have made a note of that somewhere. This was a project that I actually wanted to direct myself at the early stages, but as I got more into the story, I got carried away and played too much Dynasty Warriors, lol, which kinda influenced the formidable characters. Anyway, as it is now it is just a script, (not that i would say no if a producer comes along) and im the process of writing something else that is within my directorial power, so keep a look out. Thanks again.

Anthony.

Anthony,

You know I liked the script, and the use of camera angles and directions were a big thing to do if this were a shooting script. And as you know, it is going to become a shooting script if I can get my contacts list back from one of my friends in New Jersey, who is also an aspiring independent producer. We work with the same people all the time. If I get it back, they will be glad to fly out here to California, to help me shoot a film. And I was able to visualize everything as if I were watching it in the movie theaters, because of the use of Camera Directions and Angles. Keep up the good work, but remember, since you have my email address, you can always call on me to edit your work, or be a proof reader, and to help you with format. I can't wait to see what else you come up with.

Vincenzo
Producer, Owner, Cinematographer
Nitemovz Productions

I read the newer draft of this and, as I said before, it was a pretty good read. You've created a pretty believable world and an exciting film.

I would say what needs work but the draft posted here is a bit different from the one I have.

Good job!

-Chris

Anthony, this is one of the best scripts I have read. The beginning pages start off shaky but it builds into something magestical. I hope you make another one about them fighting evil. It was very emotional and well written. KUDOS!

Ryan

Thanks Ryan, I'm glad you liked the script. This is actually the first part of a trilogy, and I'm currently working on the instalments, so keep a look out -- more majestical things to come. If you have any scripts that needs reviewing, let me know, and I send you some feedback.

Anthony