The Bath by Matthew Orobko - Short - The Bath' is the second part of Matthew Orobko's Trilogy of Love & Death (the first part being Cold Feet). Inspired by the song 'Digital Bath' by The Deftones, 'The Bath' chronicles a very strange and bizarre fantasy of a seemingly normal man. 4 pages - doc, format 8)

... i don't get it.

What was the point of this?
Really?
A trilogy of these?
Please be more creative with your work.

ADD ON:

Flesh out the characters. (no pun intended) Make more dialouge. Give reasons for actions. etc.

To describe more of the 'trilogy' aspect of the (soon to be) 3 works:

I call it the Trilogy of Love & Death meaning a trilogy of three stories that deal with the obsessiveness of love even with the element of death involved.

I chose to use the aspects of before death, during death and after death and to analyze love during these 3 different times.

To be more specific, the actual chronology of the trilogy goes like this:

Before Death: Candy (coming soon)

During Death: The Bath

After Death: Cold Feet


Candy will be submitted to Simply Scripts soon. I hope you enjoy these. And I appreciate all that read and leave constructive criticism.

Hi Matthew. I just read The bath, and I like the backs and forths, but please the size of the paragraphs is a pain on...Keep them clean in order to averyone read them with easy.

Where are the others scripts of the trilogy?


Now go to read my short scripts you will enjoy them...I hope!

Still and Smilling - Diabolical Fishing - The Fish Bowl

Thanks for the comments Helio. I'll be sure to read yur scripts as soon as I can.

In regards to your questions:

As mentioned in the post above yours, the first part of the trilogy that was submitted to Simply Scripts is called Cold Feet (after death). The third part of the trilogy (before death) will be submitted to the site soon and it is tentatively titled Candy Or: Covered In Slut's Blood.

Quoted from mattman ....Covered In Slut's Blood.

Ha!

Man, if you've got the balls to give your story a title like that, I will certainly have to check it out.

Don't know if we'll see it up on a marquee anytime soon though...

Yeah this is a great and sellable title, isn't it?

Once that script is submitted you will all see the meaning of the title within the context of the story. Haha. I promise.

Quoted Text Yeah this is a great and sellable title, isn't it?

So I'm not the only one who thinks seelable is a word...?

Yeah, it is a Big mistake!

Matt

I gotta go with Helio on this one. The paragraphs were huge and need to be broken into three to five lines only. It makes the read much smoother. Good story. Needs more dialog. Good luck.

Spencer McDonald